mumi-girl  +  872490 Sun, 23 Aug 09 04:03 PM Hey (:   Please check my grammar in this sentance:   Many develop an eating disorder which can lead to diabetes, heart attack or other obesity related illnesses. mumi-girl Joined on Thu, May 14 2009 New Member 24 Grammar, Correcting

	Geoffmarbella  +  872495 Sun, 23 Aug 09 04:37 PM Two options add an "s" to make heart attack plural or put an "a" after the comma to make ... , a heart etc.... Either makes the sentence is correct     Geoffmarbella Joined on Sun, Aug 23 2009 New Member 04 Grammar, Plurals, Commas, Punctuation, Sentences, Correcting

	Anonymous  suggested by Anonymous  +  872506 Sun, 23 Aug 09 05:24 PM My suggested version:  Many people develop an eating disorder, which can lead to diabetes, heart attacks or other obesity-related illnesses.  Sincerely,   James (P.S. the comma is necessary after "disorder" because the relative pronoun "which" does not refer to "disorder"; rather, it refers to "Many people develop an eating disorder."  Grammar books would construe that use of "which" as meaning "a fact that.") Anonymous Grammar, Pronouns, Commas, Relative Pronouns, Punctuation, Correcting

	Yoong Liat  +  872519 Sun, 23 Aug 09 06:39 PM mumi-girl “ Please check my grammar in this sentance: Many develop an eating disorder which can lead to diabetes, heart attack or other obesity related illnesses. ” obesity-related illnesses. Yoong Liat Joined on Mon, Sep 4 2006 Veteran Member 6,757 Grammar, Correcting