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Hey guys, I am bad at english. Do you guys mind going through my paragraph correcting the grammar and other mistakes i made, and give me a review thanksCharacter Chart
Sergeant-Major Morris is the catalyst for the story: he brings the monkey's paw to the Whites home. He is “a tall, burly man, beady of eye and rubicund of visage(pg1)”, “whose eyes get brighter after his third glass of whiskey(pg2)” at the Whites' hearth. Morris is both familiar and exotic. Morris and Mr. White began their lives in approximately the same way; Mr. White remembers his friend as "a slip of a youth in the warehouse," But in his twenty-one years of travel and soldiering, Morris has seen the world and has brought back tales of "wild scenes and doughty deeds; of wars and plagues and strange peoples." Morris also carries with him the monkey's paw, which changes all the Whites' lives forever.
Mr. White is the protagonist of the story, he is the father of the family. From the story, it did not display a lot of physical characteristics of him, but a lot of indirect personalities. When Major Morris threw the Monkey’s paw into the fire, White reacted strongly by snatching it back quickly from the fire. Mr. White has a lot of interactions between Herbert, they played Chess and games together, This show that Mr. White is a very real person who loved his son and Mr. White and Mrs. White suggests using the paw to bring back their son, and Mr. White is against it, we know it is because of fear and not because he didn't love Herbert.
Herbert is the son of Mrs. and Mr. Whites who works in a factory of Maw and Meggins, he was the first person that asked Morris about if he ever used the power of the Monkey’s Paw. "Well, why don't you have three, sir?" said Herbert White cleverly. He suggested his father to wish for 200 pounds, which leads to the death of Herbert "If you only cleared the house, you'd be quite happy, wouldn't you?" said Herbert, with his hand on his shoulder. "Well, wish for two hundred pounds, then; that'll just do it.“ From these facts, Herbert is a clever and thoughtful kid, he wanted to give advise and help the family to have a better living.
Mrs. White is the wife of Mr. White, she plays an important role of the story because she brings the resolution of the story. The 200 pound caused the death of Herbert, to revive Herbert, she must use the Monkey’s Paw again, but she missed thought the consequences that will happen. "No," she cried triumphantly; "we'll have one more. Go down and get it quickly, and wish our boy alive again." another quote will be "Wish!" she cried, in a strong voice." It is foolish and wicked," he faltered. "Wish!" repeated his wife.
In “The Monkey’s Paw” Mr. Morris, a old friend of the Whites, returns from India with strange tales of his life and with a strange object--- a monkey’s paw. This paw has a spell put on it by a Fakir (a holy man), he tells the Whites. Morris goes on to say that the fakir wanted to show that “fate ruled people’s lives, and that those who interfered with it did so to their sorrow. He put a spell on it so that three separate men could each have three wishes from it” As the story unfolds, Jacobs provides hints that, indeed, the Monkey’s paw does posses some strange powers, and that temptation to make three wishes is a grave mistake. First, Herbert asks Morris is he has made his three wishes “I have, he said quietly and his blotchy face whitened.” After the conversation between Morris and Mr. White. We begun to know more about the Monkey’s Paw, from Mr. Morris’s facial expression, we know that Monkey’s Paw is not something that’s good to use. Later, Morris told us about the first owner of this Paw, the last owner wishes for death, this fact gives us a weird thought. As the story flows, the White’s wished for 200 pounds, Herbert died in the next day because he was caught by a machine in the factory, The company paid the whites 200 pounds as a indemnification. The moral of the story tells us if you are in desire of wanting you must also sacrifice in order to balance your needs.
In “The Monkey’s Paw” two major conflicts appears in the story, person versus fate, and person versus himself. Person versus fate because the White’s do not know what will happen next, since they already lost Herbert, they don’t know what will other two wishes bring to them. Person versus himself because Morris was afraid when he saw his wife telling him to revive his son “Even his wife's face seemed changed as he entered the room. It was white and expectant, and to his fears seemed to have an unnatural look upon it. He was afraid of her.” He was also in fear when he don’t want to see the mutilated body of his son. “She ran to the door, but her husband was before her, and catching her by the arm, held her tightly.”
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