Hello guys,
I need your help. I have to inform my cousins that my grandfather died. Could someone please check my letter.
Thank you

Dear cousins,
I am sorry to tell you that my father Ivan passed away last month (10th) at the age of 90. We all have a hard time and my mother especially. He was of great help to all of us. His love to us give him a strength to come to this age (to live so long). We pray God to reword him for all the good he done in this world.

Kind Regards (With Love),
Your cousin Lukas with (and) family

Ps I would like to hear how are you and is there any new member in the family.
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Dear cousins,

I am sorry to tell you that my father Ivan passed away last month (the 10th) at the age of 90. His love for us gave him the strength to reach this age. We have all been having a hard time and my mother especially. He was of great help to all of us. We pray God to reward him for all the good he did in this world.

With love,
Your cousin Lukas and family

PS: I would like to hear how you all are and whehter there is any new member of the family.
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Thanks a lot Mister Micawber,
Your version is much better.
I'm sorry for your loss. However, you say "your grandfather" but then you say "my father." Which was it? We do not (in English) refer to our grandfathers as "father."
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It doesn't matter the most imprtant thing that the structure is correct

but i dont know the layout it depends upon if you are using american or british style. In our school we are using british style and we first start by greating the person and asking him about his or her parents in the first paragraph. In the second we write the body of the letter. In the third we are using sentences like(waiting for reply ,counting the hours to meet you). The last line we write yours lovingly and name of the sender

hope you found it useful.
Thank you Grammar Geek. He was my grandfather but my father is sending the letter.
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Oh, I see. Well, in any case, I'm sorry for the loss to your family. My condolences to your father and you.
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