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Latest post Mon, Aug 31 2009 12:28 AM by Saltukhan. 1 replies.
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Saltukhan  +  879220 Sat, 29 Aug 09 11:53 PM
hey people

i need some correction and some advices.


i have some paragraphs but i think that these paragraphs can be more effective and more literarisch.

What do you advise? How could we make these better? I need to find a way tell this in a more effective style.


Normal 0 21 false false false MicrosoftInternetExplorer4 /* Style Definitions */ table.MsoNormalTable {mso-style-name:"Normal Tablo"; mso-tstyle-rowband-size:0; mso-tstyle-colband-size:0; mso-style-noshow:yes; mso-style-parent:""; mso-padding-alt:0cm 5.4pt 0cm 5.4pt; mso-para-margin:0cm; mso-para-margin-bottom:.0001pt; mso-pagination:widow-orphan; font-size:10.0pt; font-family:"Times New Roman"; mso-ansi-language:#0400; mso-fareast-language:#0400; mso-bidi-language:#0400;}

"I completed my first internship in Zti Çelik. Zti Çelik is a Ford Otosan supplier. I worked here to get used to workshop machines.

In 2007, i started to adminstration and management internships in Kadim . Kadim is a manufacturer of decorative radiators. I learnt management skills, applications and politics of the firm."


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Normal 0 21 false false false MicrosoftInternetExplorer4 st1\:*{behavior:url(#ieooui) } /* Style Definitions */ table.MsoNormalTable {mso-style-name:"Normal Tablo"; mso-tstyle-rowband-size:0; mso-tstyle-colband-size:0; mso-style-noshow:yes; mso-style-parent:""; mso-padding-alt:0cm 5.4pt 0cm 5.4pt; mso-para-margin:0cm; mso-para-margin-bottom:.0001pt; mso-pagination:widow-orphan; font-size:10.0pt; font-family:"Times New Roman"; mso-ansi-language:#0400; mso-fareast-language:#0400; mso-bidi-language:#0400;}

"During my education i started to work in Xel Chemicals. Xel is manufacturer of constructional paints. I started to work in 2007. I worked as a domectic and international sales responsible. I prepared marketing reports.  I had phone calls with customers ( domestic or foreign). I provided requirements of customers.

 

I started to Mascoline Co. in June, 2009 in İstanbul. I worked in Mascoline Co. as purchasing export import responsible for 2,5 months. 2 months officially, half month unofficially

I was dealing with international trade jobs. I prepared export documents. I performed purchasing processes. I was the charged person to provide coordination between planning, quality control, logistics and production departments."



best regards


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Saltukhan  +  880453 Mon, 31 Aug 09 12:28 AM
sorry i realised some mistakes

some kind of computer error has occured here


i have to write it again

i need your advices still


I completed my first internship in Zti Çelik. Zti Çelik is a Ford Otosan supplier. I worked here to get used to workshop machines.

In 2007, i started to adminstration and management internships in Kadim . Kadim is a manufacturer of decorative radiators. I learnt management skills, applications and politics of the firm.


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During my education i started to work in Xel Chemicals. Xel is manufacturer of constructional paints. I started to work in 2007. I worked as a domectic and international sales responsible. I prepared marketing reports.  I had phone calls with customers ( domestic or foreign). I provided requirements of customers.

 

I started to Mascoline Co. in June, 2009 in İstanbul. I worked in Mascoline Co. as purchasing export import responsible for 2,5 months. 2 months officially, half month unofficially

I was dealing with international trade jobs. I prepared export documents. I performed purchasing processes. I was the charged person to provide coordination between planning, quality control, logistics and production departments.


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