Plz Help me about motivation letter

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Anonymous  #499026  Thu, 10 Apr 08 04:58 PM
Hi everybody. My name is Huy and I come from Vietnam.I want to apply to university in Holland. They asked me to write a motivation letter. I don't know how to write it. After spending 2 days, i hope it's ok.  My writting skill is bad >.< 

Here it is

 

MOTIVATION LETTER

I am a graduate student of bachelor in business at Cantho University. I am specialized in general accountant. I would like to take part in a Master course which will be held next September. Name of this course is Monetary Economics and Financial institution.

At university, and even in my high school years, I had a great chances to join many activities which concern about business. Besides, my female cousin has work for one of biggest bank in Vietnam. So that when I was young, i was interested in business. After graduating high school, I decided to study accounting.  At the time I studied a university,  the business school manager gave their students  many opportunities to meet successful business man. This is a wonderful time to experience not only with theory but also practical examples. In fourth year, I had a chance to practice at a bank. This bank is very famous in Vietnam. At this time, I tried to do my best to complete my thesis and my works at bank. At the end of practical time, the bank managers asked me to work for them. And at the same time, I was chosen by another bank. And I decided to work for second bank. Although this bank setted up for a short time, I think it is the great chance to work with new environment. After taking more than 2 months, I stopped working because I got a Mekong 1000 project scholarship. With this scholarship, I can study aboard for 2 years. And after that, I will return to Vietnam to work for Cantho  authority. With knowledge that I learn, I hope I can not only contribute to development of Cantho City but also in Mekong Delta area.

I can speak English well. At the moment, I spend a lot of time for practicing English. I hope I can communicate with local people fluently when I go to Holland.

I am able to work alone, or part of team. And I like to work with people. I am flexible and opened mind. And if it is needed, I enjoyed organizing different tasks. I like working under pressure. At the second year at university, I thought I had much free time so that I decided to register a diploma in IT. This qualification is published by NIIT  India. 2 years  later, I finished my course.

I would like to take apart in Master course about Monetary Economics and Financial institution and study aboard. Because it is a excellent opportunity to improve my knowledge and my skills. Besides, studying aboard is a good chance to experience with new environment, especially dynamic environment in Holland

I hope that the above experience, knowledge and skills make me convenient for filling requirements of your university.

Yours faithfully

 

  
Mister Micawber  #500106  Sun, 13 Apr 08 11:28 AM
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I have underlined some problem areas, Huy, and stricken out some things that should be removed:


MOTIVATION LETTER

I am a graduate student of bachelor in business at Cantho University. I am specialized in general accountant. I would like to take part in a Master course which will be held next September. Name of this course is Monetary Economics and Financial institution.

At university, and even in my high school years, I had a great chances to join many activities which concern about business. Besides, my female cousin has work for one of biggest bank in Vietnam. So that when I was young, i was interested in business. After graduating high school, I decided to study accounting.  At the time I studied a university,  the business school manager gave their students  many opportunities to meet successful business man. This is a wonderful time to experience not only with theory but also practical examples. In fourth year, I had a chance to practice at a bank. This bank is very famous in Vietnam. At this time, I tried to do my best to complete my thesis and my works at bank. At the end of practical time, the bank managers asked me to work for them. And at the same time, I was chosen by another bank. And I decided to work for second bank. Although this bank setted up for a short time, I think it is the great chance to work with new environment. After taking more than 2 months, I stopped working because I got a Mekong 1000 project scholarship. With this scholarship, I can study aboard for 2 years. And after that, I will return to Vietnam to work for Cantho  authority. With knowledge that I learn, I hope I can not only contribute to development of Cantho City but also in Mekong Delta area.

I can speak English well. At the moment, I spend a lot of time for practicing English. I hope I can communicate with local people fluently when I go to Holland.

I am able to work alone, or part of team. And I like to work with people. I am flexible and opened mind. And if it is needed, I enjoyed organizing different tasks. I like working under pressure. At the second year at university, I thought I had much free time so that I decided to register a diploma in IT. This qualification is published by NIIT  India. 2 years  later, I finished my course.

I would like to take apart in Master course about Monetary Economics and Financial institution and study aboard. Because it is a excellent opportunity to improve my knowledge and my skills. Besides, studying aboard is a good chance to experience with a new environment, especially the dynamic environment in Holland.

I hope that the above experience, knowledge and skills make me convenient for filling requirements of your university.

Yours faithfully,

 
  
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