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adonis

#52641 Fri, 29 Oct 04 09:46 AM

hello
I am not sure this paragraph is correct.
if you find something wrong in this paragraph, please help me to correct.

In recent ten years, few people in taiwan overly have been felling trees, such as padauk,mangrove for the sake of earning their private profits that have ruined the luxuriant forest once.

thank you very much.

adonis

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nona the brit

#52667 Fri, 29 Oct 04 12:45 PM

Hello,

In recent ten years, Choose either In recent years, or the last decade or the last ten years.

few people in taiwan Taiwan. This is a proper noun and needs a capital letter.

overly have been felling trees, have been felling too many trees, or have been over-harvesting trees, or have been intensively/overly logging trees. The problem is really the word order.

such as padauk,mangrove paduak and mangrove.

for the sake of earning their private profits could be re-phrased a little but is ok.

that have ruined the luxuriant forest once. 'That have' presumably applies to the profits. If not, you will need to re-phrase. I think you mean the 'once luxuriant forest' (the forest used to be luxuriant but is not now) rather than 'ruined the luxuriant forest once' (which means that they ruined the forest on one occasion only).

nona the brit

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The name says it all.

Capital letters, Nouns, Word order