Advice/comments about my personal profile (C.V.)

Hello,

I'm in my final tweaking of my C.V. and I am quite satisfied with my personal profile - except with the first sentence may be -  but I would like to get outsides comments/advice and a quick check about the typo, and punctuation.

My profile is based on international b2b marketing and sales, which enabled me to acquire excellent oral and written communication skills. Being goal driven, self-motivated and hard working, I am able to work in a fast-paced and demanding environment. In addition, my proactive attitude enabled me to take on new responsibilities and to develop my organisational and team working skills.

I tried to use only active and positive words to make sure that this first paragraph in my C.V. will catch the recruiter attention Do you think I manage to do so?

If you have any comments/advice they will be more than welcome and if you spotted a mistake make sure tolet me know

Cheers,
Ludo

Lazarus wrote:

COUME wrote: Hello, I'm in my final tweaking of my C.V. and I am quite satisfied with my personal profile - except with the first sentence may be -  but I would like to get outsides comments/advice and a quick check about the typo, and punctuation. My profile is based on international b2b marketing and sales, which enabled me to acquire excellent oral and written communication skills. Being goal driven, self-motivated and hard working, I am able to work in a fast-paced and demanding environment. In addition, my proactive attitude enabled me to take on new responsibilities and to develop my organisational and team working skills. I tried to use only active and positive words to make sure that this first paragraph in my C.V. will catch the recruiter attention Do you think I manage to do so? If you have any comments/advice they will be more than welcome and if you spotted a mistake make sure tolet me know Cheers, Ludo Ludo-- The thing that jumps out at me is your tense shifts.  I'm not sure which way you'd like to go, but you need to be consistent with your tense. Cheers-- Lazarus

Hello Lazarus,

I have been thinking about that today but I can't find a way to be consistent with my tense. Because when I attempted to write a draft, it, it does not sound good to my ears... So it is because my French ears are bad at recognizing correct English...

Is the personal profile mentionned above really shocking to an English reader? I'm not putting in question your comment, it is just that I can't seem to go anywhere with its tweaking using only the same tense

Cheers,
Ludovic