cv , i need your advise , should i add something???plzzzzzzzzzzzz

adress ***

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e-mail adresse:  ***@hotmail.com

Phone number :00000000000 

 

 

PRESENTATION:

 

Last name: aaaaaaaaaaaaa

First name:llllllllllllllllllllllllll

Date of birth: January 01^rd 1982

Nationality: ***

 

PROFESSIONAL OBJECTIVE

 

Seeking a position in an English Speaking Organization requiring creativity and to gain valuable knowledge from onsite experience

 

 

EDUCATION

 

High School Diploma in Experimental Science, Ecoles ffffffffff,

            city, country, June 2005

 

Foundation year, University of HHHHHHH, city, country, September 2006

 

Specialized Courses: Personal Development, Business English, English for Commerce, Writing Skills, and Quantitative methods.

 

 

ADDITIONAL BACKGROUND

 

ü      Fluent in Arabic, French and English

ü      Some Spanish

ü      Possesses great computer skills, as I am familiar with most computer softwares

ü      I am a very creative person, outspoken, sociable, energetic, organized and always ready to learn more.

 

That's an understatement. Very thin.

Your objective is too vague. what sort of industry do you want to work in - what sort of career goals do you have? Just 'a job in an English company' doesn't exactly tell anyone anything, does it. Valuable knowledge of what? what type of environment?

Are you sure you didn't get your high school diploma until you were 23 years old? If that really is the case then you probably need to include some explanation on what you were doing from the age of 18, normal graduation age. That's the first thing I would think as a recruiter - how come a 24 year old has no work experience, has only just acquired their high school diploma, and has done one year of a degree?
Also, why are you leaving your degree course?

Do you have any work experience? Do you have any experience relevant to work from your studies (i.e. led a team, researched something, took responsibility etc).

What computer skills do you have exactly 'most software' is not detailed enough. List the programmes you are competent in.

A brief personal statement is a good idea too.

Don't forget that when you apply for a job that person may have several hundred applictions in front of them. They will then narrow this down to a short-list of maybe only 6 people to interview. Your CV has to jump out at them and make you sound better than all the others. At the moment it says nothing about why anyone should employ you. You are 24 but this reads as though you have no experience in the adult world of work or studies.

Ah that makes more sense - your date of birth is incorrect on the original.

I would still flesh it out a bit as suggested.