After this incident they parted their ways...

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Jackson6612  #553642  Mon, 11 Aug 08 07:45 PM
Please correct the following text:
After this incident they parted their ways and this parting was the end of their prime. None of the two could create any major wave as solo. Sometimes creativeness cannot work through a single mind, it needs more than individual to emphasis its potency.
  
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optilang  #553647  Mon, 11 Aug 08 07:52 PM
After this incident they parted their ways and this parting was the end of their time at the top prime. Neither None of the two could create any major waves as a solo artist/performer. Sometimes creativeness cannot work through a single mind, it needs/takes more than individuality to emphasise its potency.
  
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Jackson6612  #553668  Mon, 11 Aug 08 08:41 PM
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After this incident they parted their ways and this parting was the end of their time at the top prime. Neither None of the two could create any major waves as a solo artist/performer. Sometimes creativeness cannot work through a single mind, it needs/takes more than individuality to emphasise its potency.


Sometimes creativeness cannot work through a single mind, it needs/takes more than individuality to emphasise its potency.

I just made up the above sentence without exactly knowing its meaning. Why couldn't invidual be used above?
  
Avangi  #553763  Tue, 12 Aug 08 01:24 AM
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they parted their ways
Hi Jackson.  I'm not sure if this is an archaic quote, but I've never heard it this way.  These days the expression is, "they parted ways," similar to "they parted company."   - A.

Edit.  It needs/takes more than the / an individual to emphasize it's potency.   Is this what you mean??
  
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Avangi  #553771  Tue, 12 Aug 08 01:48 AM
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[Sometimes creativeness cannot work through a single mind, it needs/takes more than individuality to emphasise its potency.


Okay, I screwed up again. "It needs/takes more than one individual to emphasize (bring out) its potency."

Just as an aside, I think "emphasize" means to strengthen (add strength), while "bring out" means to release the strength which already exists.  (This is an oversimplification.)

Also, you need a semicolon after "mind," absent the conjunction.

  - A.
  
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