Re: Please help me to amend my appointment letter.

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Dear Sir/Madam
I am going to make an appointment with a San Miguel Emotion: beer company, yet we haven't met before and my company is intending to establish a business association with them. Therefore, we really hope can meet them for further discuss the opportunity, below is my sample appointment letter. From my point of view, to write an effective appointment correspondence isn't necessary to be too long, I am not sure if it is right. So please can you tell me what are the ideas to write this kind of letters and can you also give me a hand to correct it?
Here is my information:
Dear Ms.June
Enclosed is an introduction to our company. We hope that after having referred to our company profile, there are opportunities to build a close working relationship with San Miguel Co.,ltd. Would it be possible for us to make an appointment to meet you on this Thursday 02 March or Friday 03 March at 10AM for further discuss possible business co-operations?

We are looking forward to hearing from you soon,
Yours sincerely,
...........
Secretary

Thanks in advance for your help
Regards,
New Member10
Have you already spoken to them or contacted them before and they have agreed to meet you? If not, I don't think you will have much luck writing in with a couple of appointment times just out of the blue.

If you have spoken to them before:

Dear Ms.June
Thank you for taking the time to talk to me and, as requested, I have enclosed some information on our company. We hope to have an opportunities to build a close working relationship with San Miguel Co.,ltd. Would it be possible for us to make an appointment to meet you on Thursday 02 March or Friday 03 March at 10am for further discussions? If these dates are not suitable we are happy to attend at your convenience.


Or if you havent't spoken to them before:

Dear Ms.June
I am writing to introduce my company, XXXX Ltd. We are a (brief summary of what you company does).


We hope to find opportunities to build a close working relationship with San Miguel Co.,ltd. amd we would like to come in to meet you to discuss this further. I will call you shortly to see if we can arrange an appointment.
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