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Orientgirlz87  #173429  Fri, 23 Dec 05 07:16 AM

Title : The Canterville Ghost         

         The story was about the famous Canterville Ghost haunts Canterville Chase, a large old house. But the ghost becomes unhappy when the new owners play terrible tricks on him. The new owners is Hiram B.Otis, the American Ambassador. Mr Otis live with his lovely wife, Mrs Otis and their children, Washongton, Virginia and the twins. Everybody who was live in this house before Mr Otis's family will not stay for a long time in there because the house really haunted. But Mr Otis's family not frighten with Canterville Ghost. Actually, Canterville Ghost's name is Sir Simon de Canterville. He was murdered his wife and live in that house for nine years after that and disappeared suddenly and very mysteriously. When the night came, Canterville Ghose was coming out from his place and tried to harass the family with make a noisy sound with wore the heavy, husty chains hung from his arms and legs. But the family still not frighten with him and gave him a small bottle of Smith's Rising Sun Oil to put at his husty chains to become quite. The Canterville Ghost was harassing them with anything style but the family also still not afraid. He became pale and ill because of the family. Lastly, he cried and Virginia was help him because she felt sorry for him. The Canterville Ghost was told the whole story about himself and Virginia agree to help him. Finally, with Virginia's help, a skeleton with chained belong's to Sir Simon de Canterville was met in the secret room. From that time, the Canterville Ghost not exist anymore. Before that, the Canterville Ghost gave jewel box to Virginia to show that he was appreciate with Virginia's help. 

  
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julielai  #174458  Mon, 26 Dec 05 03:58 AM

Hi Orientgirlz87,

I think you are struggling with tenses and verb forms.

e.g.

         The story was about the famous Canterville Ghost  in Canterville Chase, a large old house. But the ghost becomes unhappy when the new owners play terrible tricks on him. The new owners is (agreement) Hiram B.Otis, the American Ambassador. Mr Otis live with his lovely wife, Mrs Otis and their children, Washongton, Virginia and the twins. Everybody who was live in this house before Mr Otis's family will not stay for a long time in there because the house is really haunted. But Mr Otis's family is not frightened with Canterville Ghost. Actually, Canterville Ghost's name is Sir Simon de Canterville.

  
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