Can anybody help me please?I'm desperate for suggestions(motivation letter)

Erkoet wrote:

Dear All, I am applying for a vacancy in another country, I worked for 3 months in that country before, now I want to move back there and start my future there, i just want to achieve the goal of getting my idea over, i revised my letter a couple of times and showed it to some friends, they suggested i should keep the first paragraph shorter, I tought i used it ok to get accros my current situation. Any suggestions or help would be wonderful. Thanks in advance for your kind help and time. Kind regards *******Motivation Letter ********* Dear Ms. Tromp Meesters,          I am writing to apply for a position of Management Assistant, as advertised on the www. Ttttttttt .com website on which I am registered to. During my University years I started working as a part- and full-time assistant to a Doctor. J. Ramon in the Sagrado Corazon Clinic in Seville. After finishing my education I found a job as a Communications and Marketing Assistant in St-Jude Medical City. This international company, which is specialized in medical devices, gave me the chance to strengthen myself and allow me to gain some useful insights by working closely with people from different levels. During the 2 years working in this company I had the opportunity to work abroad at the Country office which was situated in City I Apply. I really enjoyed my stay and learned a lot during my time spent there . I got to know Country and the way of working in another country. In the meantime I found happiness on a personal level with someone living in Country and so time has come to decide and look further into the future. This is why today I am also looking for a new challenge on a professional level.        You would be better to emphasise your wish to take on new challenges and expand your career and not refer to personal attachments.   I am familiar with the COMPANY BRAND building from my time in City I Apply and was impressed by the international opportunities provided by your company on their website. I feel I have a range of relevant skills that I can bring to COMPANY NAME. My communication skills have greatly developed both through my work experience and through my degree. During my professional career I have not only attended congresses, but frequently organized all accommodation, access and travel to all of these events. By being involved in various activities I quickly have learnt the importance of time management. This was always reflected in my daily work. In addition to my growing administrative knowledge, I can offer many skills gained from my studies, work and other activities: for example; dealing professionally with a wide range of people. working enthusiastically and productively under pressure. clear, concise writing for different contexts. working on a variety of teams and on my own initiative. overcoming obstacles and negotiating for the support I need.   I hope my CV shows that I have the skills and potential for which you are searching .  I am available for interview at any time and look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely,   Patricia Dominguez Resume attached as MS Word document.