Can anyone help me correct my introduction?

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Anonymous  #186253  Fri, 20 Jan 06 12:12 PM

In order to improve the air quality in Hong Kong , a wide range of means(measures) have been taken to reduce vehicle emissions; however, owing to the increasing pollution from neighboring Guangdong Province and ever-taller new buildings , air quality is getting worse , resulting in international attention and a poor image being presented overseas. It is also difficult to see the clear blue sky now ! To my worry, i think it is necessary to discuss the problem of air pollution in depth and i would like to suggest some ways to deal with it.

why i cannot use "means"?

My teacher also write  a question mark on "To my worry", do you think that it is strange too and what word can i use to take the place of this clause?

Thank^^

  
nona the brit  #186323  Fri, 20 Jan 06 03:43 PM

We just don't say that we take means. We take measures.

I agree 'to my worry' sounds odd. I'd just take this whole part out. Or you could say 'This is of great concern' or 'This concerns me greatly'. Worry is not quite the right word for this context.

  
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