Can anyone help me with my invitation letter?

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Anonymous

#355981 Thu, 26 Apr 07 10:26 AM

Dear all,

Can u help me to make my invitation letter become more fomal and expressing like a large company?My boss said my tone doesn't grand enough. Thx a lot.

Coco

Dear sir／madam　　　　　　　:

Thank you for supporting ABC at all times. As celebration of *** Opening, a cocktail party will be held on 20^th May 2007 at 7 P.M. on Level five at ***. We invite you to attend the party with deepest sincerity. Further, a “*** Signature Rewarded Card” will be issued on upon showing this letter on the night. It will be our pleasure to have you attended.
　

Yours sincerely,

ABC

Anonymous

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Doll

#358202 Mon, 30 Apr 07 08:51 PM

Start with My almighty madam. Stick out tongue [:P] This will grand enough.Kidding.

Dear sir／madam　　　　　　　:

Thank you for supporting ABC at all times--First of all, we want to tender our thanks to you for your great support to ABC at all times.. As celebration of *** Opening, a cocktail party will be held on 20^th May 2007 at 7 P.M.-- we are looking forward to seeing you at our cocktail party which will be a celebration of *** at the same time ... on Level five at ***.--- We invite you to attend the party with deepest sincerity. Further, a “*** Signature Rewarded Card” will be issued on upon showing this letter on the night.(I didn't understnad this sentence) It will be our pleasure to have you attended.---- We will be gratefull if you can attend our party.
　

Yours sincerely,

ABC

This is my try.

Doll

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