Can anyone read my little book revew and fix the mistakes:D

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Anonymous  #358458  Tue, 01 May 07 08:27 AM

and when you see no matter what mistake please fix it.

   „The Captive” author is Joyce Hansen. Joyce Hansen, a former New York City schoolteacher is a well-known author of both fiction and nonfiction. Hansen was born and raised in the Bronx. She has written very many books for children and teenagers.

„The Captive” is a historical fiction.The book was published in 1994.

    A principal character is Kofi. The book  is about the capture of Kofi, a 12-year-old son of an Ashanti chief. Kofi is his father favorite child. The boy is taken and subsequently sold after his father is betrayed and murdered by a trusted family slave. He makes two friends on the trip across the ocean; one is a white indentured servant, the other is another black slave. Once they reach America, they are all sold to a Puritan farmer in Massachusetts. Eventually, the boys run away. They are chased onto a ship and discovered by it is captain, who agrees to help them. Kofi return back to Africa, but it is not mentioned again until the epilogue. His life in Africa is presented as both orderly and good.

    In the book was intresting when Kofi`s flute was stolen, he hunted it down like a fox stalking a rabbit, and finally he found it. It means that the fluete was very important for him. The discussion of a black man's involvement in the selling of others of his race is handled well; and the topic of slavery in New England is one not often discussed. Kofi is very spunky, he never gave up.  One thing that impressed me the most was when Kofi was on the slave ship, the fire in his heart and his flute in his hands kept him alive through all the disease and beating he faced. I felt a little bad for the characters in the book when they get kidnapped and sent to America. In the book, there were also very intresting colourfully nature discriptions. It was interesting to read about the things Kofi encountered and the Ashanti culture, example women in the Ashanti will not marry without the consent of their parents. The Ashanti religion is a mixture of spiritual and supernatural powers. They believe that plants, animals and trees have souls and also they  believe in fairies, witches, and forest monsters. The book was quite understandable and good to read.

   In conclusion I liked the book and enjoyed it a lot, because there was vital reason. „The Captive”  is great book that is definetly worth reading. The author puts a visual in your head that makes you feel as if you are actualy there and you can imagine how the main character, Kofi, feels.

 

  
Doll  #360651  Sat, 05 May 07 12:09 PM
 The author of „The Captive” author is Joyce Hansen. Joyce Hansen, a former New York City schoolteacher, is a well-known author of both fiction and nonfiction. Hansen was born and raised in the Bronx. She has written very many books for children and teenagers.

„The Captive” is a historical fiction.The book was published in 1994.

    A principal The main character in the book is Kofi. The book  is about the capture of Kofi, a 12-year-old son of an Ashanti chief. Kofi is his father's favorite child. The boy is has been  taken and subsequently sold after his father is has been betrayed and murdered by a trusted family slave. He makes two friends on the trip across the ocean; one is a white indentured servant, the other is another black slave. Once When they reach America, they are have been all sold to a Puritan farmer in Massachusetts. Eventually, the boys run away. They are have been chased onto a ship and discovered by it is its captain, who agrees to help them. Kofi returns back to Africa, but it is not mentioned again until the epilogue. His life in Africa is has been presented as both orderly and good.

    In the book was the most intresting event is when Kofi`s flute was  has been stolen, he has hunted it down like a fox stalking a rabbit, and finally he has found it. It  which means that the fluete was is very important for him. The discussion of a black man's involvement in the selling of others of his race is has been  handled well; and the topic of slavery in New England is one not often discussed. Kofi is very spunky, he never gave gives up.  One thing that impressed me the most was is when Kofi was is on the slave ship, the fire in his heart and his flute in his hands kept keeps him alive through all the disease and beating he faced. I felt a little bad for the characters in the book when they got kidnapped and sent to America. In the book, there were are also very intresting colourfully nature descriptions. It was is interesting to read about the Ashanti culture and the  things Kofi has encountered and the Ashanti culture for example, women in the Ashanti will not marry without the consent of their parents. The Ashanti religion is a mixture of spiritual and supernatural powers. They believe that plants, animals and trees have souls and also they  believe in fairies, witches, and forest monsters. The book was is quite understandable and good to read worths reading.

   In conclusion, I liked the book and enjoyed it a lot, because there was is a vital reason. „The Captive”  is great book that is definetly worth reading. The author puts a visual scenery in your head that makes you feel as if you are were actualy there and you can imagine how the main character, Kofi, feels.

(While you are telling a story either use present tense or past tense. Don't shift the tenses. In your first paragraph you use present tense but later you use past tense.However, I have changed all of them into present tenses.)

  
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julielai  #360747  Sat, 05 May 07 05:21 PM

Hi anon.,

You need to tell your readers when and where the story takes place early on.

  
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