Can anyone help me write a introduction buisness letter?

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Dolcegirl  #388473  Thu, 05 Jul 07 10:40 PM
Hi My name is Jennifer. I just got a job as a Sales Rep for a clothing company. I was wondering if anyone can edit a introduction Buisness letters? I Basically have to write a letter to many distributors all around the world introducing the brand and making them my client. Iv'e never done this before.
I'm kind of confused how this works.

Thank You,
Jennifer
  
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Doll  #389254  Sun, 08 Jul 07 01:16 AM

Hi Jennifer,  

First try please so that we can correct it and give our suggestions to you. Smile [:)]

  
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Dolcegirl  #390632  Wed, 11 Jul 07 05:10 AM
Thank you for responding. I tried writting it. <img src="/emoticons/emotion-1.gif" alt="Smile [:)]" />


Dear …….

My name is Jennifer Urinovsky. Im a sales represtnitive for CO2 designed by Pascal Benouaiche. CO2 is a collection of sophisticated close-fitting cashmere sweaters and t-shirts adorned with unique prints such as birds, Buddha and butterflies. Each piece a work of art that could be displayed in a gallery, but instead is designed to allow the sensuality and style of the wearer to shine through. The designs represent both personal and spiritual growth. Pascal Benouaiche designs radiates glamour and comfort, not only through plush cashmere, but through the use of luminous colors, original images of Buddha and native American and Eastern birds, and decorated words such as Love, Wish, and Luck. CO2 was Launched in early 2005 by international designer Pascal Benouaiche. it is sold at select boutiques nationwide, including, Saks 5th Avenue, Planet Blue, H Lorenzo, Boogies, Politix, Lounge, Scoop, Trio, Magnolia, Diane Merrick, Shop, Yaso and others. His line is sold in New York, Florida, Los Angeles and Paris, in over 100 stores. We are also launching our Spring and Fall season, and soon a kids line and a dogs line.CO2 is worn by a many celebrities like Fergie, Bai Ling, Angela Bassett, Daryl Hannah, Torri Spelling and Cassandra Hepburn. Also it has been featured on many TV shows such as Love Inc. Bones, OC, CSI.

We are having two upcoming shows of our Fall and spring show. in August. One is in Los Angeles and the other one in Vegas (I’m finding out the date) Our Fall collection is !00% cashmere and the spring collection is bamboo silk and 100 cashmere. For more information about CO2 visit www.co2collection.com. If you are interested in our collection and wish to be a custumer please do not hesitate to respond.

Sincerely,
Jennifer Urinovsky
  
Doll  #391440  Thu, 12 Jul 07 10:02 PM
Dear ……. ,

My name is Jennifer Urinovsky. Im a sales represtnitive for CO2 designed by Pascal Benouaiche. CO2 is a collection of sophisticated close-fitting cashmere sweaters and t-shirts adorned with unique prints such as birds, Buddha and butterflies. Each piece a work of art that could be displayed in a gallery, but instead is designed to allow the sensuality and style of the wearer to shine through. The designs represent both personal and spiritual growth. Pascal Benouaiche designs radiates glamour and comfort, not only through plush cashmere, but through ( I am not sure of this prep.) the use of luminous colors, original images of Buddha and native American and Eastern birds, and (so much use of and) decorated words such as Love, Wish, and Luck. CO2 was Launched in early 2005 by international designer Pascal Benouaiche. it is sold at select boutiques nationwide, including, Saks 5th Avenue, Planet Blue, H Lorenzo, Boogies, Politix, Lounge, Scoop, Trio, Magnolia, Diane Merrick, Shop, Yaso and others. His line is sold in New York, Florida, Los Angeles and Paris, in over 100 stores. We are also launching our Spring and Fall season, and soon a kids line and a dogs line ( what do you mean by the line?).CO2 is worn by a many celebrities like Fergie, Bai Ling, Angela Bassett, Daryl Hannah, Torri Spelling and Cassandra Hepburn. Also it has been featured on many TV shows such as Love Inc. Bones, OC, CSI.

We are having two upcoming shows of our Fall and spring show. in August. One is in Los Angeles and the other one in Vegas (I’m finding out the date) Our Fall collection is !00% cashmere and the spring collection is bamboo silk and 100 cashmere. For more information about CO2 visit www.co2collection.com. If you are interested in our collection and wish to be a custumer please do not hesitate to respond.
I have highlighted the places where there are mistakes for you. Try to paraphrase them and italize the special names.
  
Anonymous  #503370  Mon, 21 Apr 08 02:13 PM

just for the record, you didn't completely correct it, you didn't put your name, address, street & street #, and postal code at the top

  
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