I would say more efficiently and with more adult structure:
1: It's too bad that the hospital policy prohibits patient access to their own medical records.
2: This sentence is written poorly: you are trying to say, "The sonograms were compatible with each other, both concluding evidence of a fetus 30 weeks gestated." Sonograms were NOT compatible with a fetus, they were compatible with each other.
The rest of these sentences are structured so poorly -even worse than #2 if that apostrophe s possible- as so not to wast my time attempting their correction. Good luck.
-Aceman Jones