d_say  +  590178 Fri, 21 Nov 08 05:52 AM Would you please make correction if required in this letter ? Subject: Request for Loan.   Dear Sir,   With due respect, I would like to inform you that I am in need of some urgent financial assistance. Please grant me $. 40,000/= (Dollars Forty thousand only) as a loan.   I would therefore request you to please consider my request sympathetically. I would be very grateful to you for your kind attention and obliged.   Thanking you,   Yours faithfully, d_say Joined on Thu, Nov 6 2008 Universe Junior Member 95 Yours Faithfully

	ayumiyoshi1314  +  590384 Fri, 21 Nov 08 05:55 PM d_say “ Would you please make correction if required in this letter ? Dear Sir,   With due respect, I would like to inform you that I am in need of some urgent financial assistance. Please grant me $. 40,000/= (Dollars Forty thousand only) as a loan.   I would therefore request you to please consider my request sympathetically. I would be very grateful to you for your kind attention and obliged.   Thanking you,   Yours faithfully, ” Include why you need financial assistance for if the one whom you are writing to reads the letter but does not the reason will be less likely to loan you any amount of money though your reason may be an important one. Also,  $. 40,000/= (Dollars Forty thousand only), is an improper way to write and ask for a loan with such a large amount of money. You could write, "Please, if you wish, grant me a sum of  forty thousand dollars as a loan. This will help me to do/complete such and such." At least that is how I would write it. REMEMBER! This is only my Opinion  so if you do not like it that is ok, it is your letter and not mine so I can not make you change your mind. Ayumi Yoshikawa ayumiyoshi1314 Joined on Tue, Nov 18 2008 Chiba, Japan New Member 46 Yours Faithfully, Whom

	Grammar Geek  +  590386 Fri, 21 Nov 08 05:59 PM Is this an actual request for money or is this a writing assignment as a school project?   Grammar Geek Joined on Tue, Jan 10 2006 Veteran Member 19,508 Barbara, who answers in American English. My housekeeping skills attest to the truth of the second law of thermodynamics: Left to themselves, things get more and more random!

	Grammar Geek  +  590506 Sat, 22 Nov 08 01:08 AM I think d_say needs to tell us that. Grammar Geek

	d_say  +  590530 Sat, 22 Nov 08 03:37 AM Good day my sweet fellows, Thank you all for your assistance. Please note this is a genuine case and in order to have some improvement in writing skills I have submitted my request for correction. d_say

	Grammar Geek  +  590906 Sat, 22 Nov 08 08:12 PM Hi d_say, The reason I asked is that where I live, you don't write a letter for a loan. There are applications that include information like your income, your other current debt, and your assets. If you were requesting money as a loan from a relative, you would say what you want to use it for and how you proposed to pay it back. The amount you are requesting to borrow is very high. I've never borrowed so much except to purchase my house, so it seemed like it was more of a writing exercise than an genuine request for funding.   Grammar Geek

	d_say  +  592671 Mon, 24 Nov 08 05:17 AM Jee Jee, Thanks for your standpoint about this letter. Please note that I have just changed the symbol of currency which was in real Rupees instead of Dollars hence it made a confusion. I had guessed that friends of english forum will understand it easily inspite of considering the amount but now I realised in order to prepare a good letter we should carefully write and rewrite and rewrite. However as learning should be a part of life if we live with courage. I am amused as I learnt a big difference of 7 C's of business communication. Anyway thanks Jee Jee once again, d_say Business Communication