Application letter for a nursery school -

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Dear forum members,

We would like to enroll our son in an English nursery school - admission is very difficult (at this age!!). Though we belive our English is acceptable for normal communication, we are not too sure about formal letter writing. We appreciate any corrections/tips/help. Thank you very much

Martha

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Martha and Koti Ramas

Debonstr. 45

80454 München

St. Paul´s School

Administrative Department

Klauser Str. 4



80434 München July 2, 2005



Dear Sir/Madam:

We would like to apply for our son´s admission to your nursery school in 2007. Our son´s name is Jamshed and he is 16 months old.

After having spoken to a friend of ours, Dr. Ravi Chandra, whose children are attending St. Paul´s, we believe your school can provide a good and stimulating environment for our son. Dr. Chandra suggested that we contact you early on, due to the growing demand for enrollment in the nursery school.



An important motivation for selecting a multinational school is our personal background. My husband Koti was born in India (his mother is Indian) and raised in China, where he visited an international school. Our family and many of our friends are spread all over the world - India, Britain, United States, Australia and Singapore - so English has become the de facto lingua franca. Apart from the language aspect, we believe that an early exposure to another culture is particularly helpful for a young child.



Should you have any further questions, please do not hesitate to contact us at the above address or by phone at (1234) 5678. We thank you for considering our application, and we look forward to hearing from you soon.





Yours sincerely,



Martha and Koti Ramas






Encl.: Application form
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Hello, and welcome to English Forums.

You have posted in a text that is difficult for me to edit. Could you please re-post in plain text?
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Hello,

sorry for causing this inconvenience. I hope the text is easier to edit now. Thanks very much for your efforts

Martha

Martha and Koti Ramas

Debonstr. 45

80454 Munchen

St. Paul´s School

Administrative Department

Klauserstr. 4

80434 Munchen July 2, 2005

Dear Sir/Madam:

We would like to apply for our son´s admission to your nursery school in 2007. Our son´s name is Jamshed and he is 16 months old.

After having spoken to a friend of ours, Dr. Ravi Chandra, whose children are attending St. paul´s, we believ your school can provide a good and stimulating environment for our son. Dr. Chandra suggested that we contact you early on, due to the growing demand for enrollment in the nursery school.

An important motivation for selecting a multinational school is our personal background. My husband Koti was born in India (his mother is Indian) and raised in China, where he visited an international school. Our family and many of our friends are spread all over the world - India, Britain, United States, Australia and Singapore - so English has become the de facto lingua franca. Apart from the language aspect, we believe that an early exposure to another culture is particularly helpful for a young child.

Should you have any further questions, please do not hesitate to contact us at the above address or by phone at (1234) 5678. We thank you for considering our application, and we look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Martha and Koti Ramas

Encl.: Application form

Very nicely done, actually-- just a couple of cosmetic changes. The date and everything else is now seen more commonly against the left margin. Good luck getting your son into this school.

Martha and Koti Ramas
Debonstr. 45
80454 Munchen

St. Paul´s School
Administrative Department
Klauserstr. 4
80434 Munchen

July 2, 2005

Dear Sir/Madam:

We would like to apply for our son´s admission to your nursery school in [month] 2007. Our son´s name is Jamshed and he is now 16 months old.

After having spoken to a friend of ours, Dr. Ravi Chandra, whose children are attending St. Paul´s, we believe your school can provide a rich and stimulating environment for our son. Dr. Chandra suggested that we contact you early on, due to the growing demand for enrollment.

An important motivation for selecting a multinational school is our personal background. My husband Koti was born in India (his mother is Indian) and raised in China, where he attended an international school. Our family and many of our friends are spread all over the world - India, Britain, the United States, Australia and Singapore - so English has become our de facto lingua franca. Apart from the language aspect, we believe that an early exposure to another culture is particularly helpful for a young child.

Should you have any further questions, please do not hesitate to contact us at the above address or by phone at (1234) 5678. We thank you for considering our application, and we look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Martha and Koti Ramas

Encl.: Application form

SystemAdministrator: A system administrator takes care of the inner workings of the entire system. These users have the ability to promote, ban and modify other users.Teachers: Users in this role are certified teachers. This may include DELTA, CELTA, TESOL, TEFL qualified professionals. Email a scan of your qualification to an admin, if you wish to be considered.
Thanks a lot for your feedback - it is very helpful. To be honest, I had to spend a lot of time putting the letter together, and I am of course very pleased to receive your positive feedback. I wish you and your team all the very best and good luck for the future -

Martha
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