Hi Soufiane,
Thank you for your answers.
With regard to your essay, we will examine it shortly. However, even though I like your essay, we are going to have pretty much start all over.
What the universities are asking for is how have you organized your life to take advantage of the opportunities? And how have you taken advantage of these opportunities to further your career goals.
Imagine if you could see a complete diary your life. For every day there were a few recorded pages. For this essay, we want to pick those pages that show you are a well qualified student to attend university specializing in computer science. Much of the other personal stuff we can leave out of the essay.
Here's what I suggest. Come back and look here on Monday. I will try to have some sample sentences and paragraphs done. We can then begin to add to these opening sentences and paragraphs.
I would say by Monday we will be about 5% done. That means that we have only just begun. There will still be lots of work ahead.
The two essays by the two different universities are very similar. So it won't be much additional work to change one to the other.
Some more questions for you.
1) Do you plan to live and work in the States after you finish? Of do ou plan to return to Morocoo?
2) If you do return to Morocco, are there lots of opportunities for you?
3) Although I think your English is good, have you taken and passed the required English proficiency tests yet?
English Proficiency".
4) Key skills that you.
Computer programming languages?, proficiency in which languages?, anything else you can think of that is helpful?
Do you see what I am beginning to do? I am getting to go into your background and extract all the "professional highlights" and skills so that we can build your biography around these points. We want to "advertise" how smart and capable you are when we do your biography.
I look forward to your response.
MountainHiker