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Hi Aaron,
After a quick look ,the way my teacher and essay books say that an essay has a structure .
And topic sentences.
The structures generally of an essay are:

Introduction
Body
Conclusion
You can look in google for "five paragraph essay"until I'll find you a specific good example.
I think the place where are you learning should provide you with (model essay) more information on essay
struture,connectives to connect paragraphs and make the essay flow(similiar to driving a car)
and topic sentence.There is different essay types such as Argumentative essay,normal essay...The other thing to concider when writing essays is if you can use first person prounouns,formal ,informal language.

Please integrate the information at the end of your essay in a paragraph,give fewer example.
Your first draft looks good,but it need more cutting and pasting to look like an essay.
I'll give quick example of a topic sentence.
(Introduction)Please don't write introduction ,just introduce your topic
There is different English language schools in Emirate.Students choose the best language school for them depend firstly on the course cost,secondly teachers profile and finally transportion
(Topic sentence 1)
Cost (As you notice in T.S.1 you'll talk about cost only in this paragraph)
(Topic sentence 2)
Teachers profile(paragraph)
(Topic sentence 3)
transportation(Paragraph)
In conclusion or in summary,you can write either of these(sum up briefly what you said in you essay,don't introduce new ideas)

You can have a look at Nawal thread cause there is some suggestion on essay writing.But be careful don't change it to argumentative essay if the teacher doesn't want to.
Good luck in your essay,your english is really good.I hope I did good and no harm.

I hope you will like my lousy essay.

Sorry that I have only just seen this post now. I've been celebrating the Chilean National day over the last four days. Have you checked what was written in another thread for Sofía en this section of the forum?
Your Introduction is very good though your conclusion isn't. It is too light. Your conclusion should leave the reader with a feeling of completion. It should do one or more of the following: summarize the supporting points, give a solution, draw a conclusion, make a prediction, restate your thesis in different words (paraphrase) or maybe even gice a final solution.
I would have given this essay an IELTS of 6 taking into account that you had written a bit more for your conclusion. The wording and style is good though there is the odd grammatical and spelling error. Nothing too serious to worry about in such a short time.

'Pray for me'

Mmm

God, inspire Aaron.

And Aaron, keep us posted about the results!

Hi Hitchhiker, I've just joined the forums, so I hate to start by arguing with you about your advice to Aaron on 'its' (no apostrophe). Surely in the case of 'its becoming...' the 'its' should take an apostrophe because what is meant is 'it is becoming...'? For example, you would have been quite correct if you had written 'It's a little long-winded...', but not if you had gone for 'Its a little...'. Right? Dropping the apostrophe is correct in the possessive sense as in, say, 'its qualities' or 'its features'.
Having said that, I shall not be long-winded but merely add for now I find the forums very interesting. I shall be back. More (word) power to all of you.

Hi all!

Well guys! I have my result in my hands and I'm very happy to let you know the score.

Listening....8
Writing.......6 (as Woodward predicted earlier)
Reading......6
Speaking.....7

Overall.......7

Guys...I really dont have the words to express my feelings for those who supported me. Simply...I am again very thankful to all you guys.

Keep up the good work.

Aaron