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Anonymous  #450582  Fri, 07 Dec 07 05:07 AM

Here is my essay. Can anyone help me check it? Thank you so much.

Through the 1950s and 60s, the economy high-speed growth , Japan has entered the ranks of leading trader, large-scale exports to overseas markets dependence has continued to increase, open up overseas markets, Japan's export trade has become the urgent need of development, the market for overseas - during this period overseas investment to become the main types of investments, this phase of Japan's foreign direct investment from the larger capacity of developing countries to markets of developed countries of Europe and America. Japan's overseas investment is another reason for the continuing escalation of the trade friction. 


 The 1960s and 70s, trade friction involves only certain commodities, but in the 1980s, it has developed to automobiles, electronics, precision instruments and other high-tech fields, as Japan's economy, China must solve the problems.

One of the effective ways is to direct foreign investment, which can cross the tariff and non-tariff barriers, but also to open up overseas markets. 


 In the mid-1980s, the yen's appreciation for Japan's foreign direct investment in the rapid development has created favorable conditions, 1972-1973 Japanese foreign direct investment, an average of 2.66 billion US dollars, to the 1984 breakthrough 10 billion US dollars, in 1987 reached 33.364 billion dollars. The efficiency-seeking foreign direct investment into Japan's important multinational companies overseas investment types, to the early 1990s, Japan's manufacturing sector, especially electrical machinery and transportation equipment industry, has established a globally integrated production system. And on the other hand appreciation of the yen to Japan's foreign trade lost their price advantage and competitiveness in the international market declined, exports shrink.

  
Mister Micawber  #451253  Sun, 09 Dec 07 10:08 AM

I have underlined some problem areas:

Through the 1950s and 60s, the economy high-speed growth , Japan has entered the ranks of leading trader, large-scale exports to overseas markets dependence has continued to increase, open up overseas markets, Japan's export trade has become the urgent need of development, the market for overseas - during this period overseas investment to become the main types of investments, this phase of Japan's foreign direct investment from the larger capacity of developing countries to markets of developed countries of Europe and America. Japan's overseas investment is another reason for the continuing escalation of the trade friction. [This should be broken into several sentences.]


 The 1960s and 70s, trade friction involves only certain commodities, but in the 1980s, it has developed to automobiles, electronics, precision instruments and other high-tech fields, as Japan's economy, China must solve the problems.

One of the effective ways is to direct foreign investment, which can cross the tariff and non-tariff barriers, but also to open up overseas markets. 


 In the mid-1980s, the yen's appreciation for Japan's foreign direct investment in the rapid development has created favorable conditions, 1972-1973 Japanese foreign direct investment, an average of 2.66 billion US dollars, to the 1984 breakthrough 10 billion US dollars, in 1987 reached 33.364 billion dollars. The efficiency-seeking foreign direct investment into Japan's important multinational companies overseas investment types, to the early 1990s, Japan's manufacturing sector, especially electrical machinery and transportation equipment industry, has established a globally integrated production system. And on the other hand appreciation of the yen to Japan's foreign trade lost their price advantage and competitiveness in the international market declined, exports shrink. [This needs breaking up into several sentences too.]


  
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