Please help me to check grammar errors. urgent . thanks.

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gary lee  #80556  Sat, 12 Mar 05 05:46 AM
Hi Teacher,

Please help me to amend the below letter as in grammar or proper sentence forming.

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Dear Susan,

Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Multimedia Developer with you. Our meeting made me better understand your company’s goal and reaffirmed my belief that this is the organization I would like to work for. As you can see, my experience and qualifications match the requirements you seek. I believe I will produce what exactly the organization/clients require and beyond.

Incidentally, multimedia development is part of my interest in life, since it is a personal interest I’ll be eager to do it with more enthusiasm and willingness and currently I’m improving my English communication skills as it is important for my career prospect.

I appreciate the time you took to interview me. I hope to hear from you soon, and would be pleased to meet with you again for another interview.

Sincerely,
Gary Lee

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Mister Micawber  #80559  Sat, 12 Mar 05 05:59 AM

Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Multimedia Developer with you. Our meeting helped me to better understand your company’s goals and reaffirmed my belief that this is the organization I would like to work for. I think you may see that my experience and qualifications match the requirements you seek. I believe I will produce exactly what your organization and its clients require and beyond.

Since multimedia development is a personal interest in my life, I shall work with enthusiasm. Currently I am improving my English communication skills, as this is also important for my career.

I appreciate the time you took to interview me. I hope to hear from you soon, and would be pleased to meet with you again for another interview.

Sincerely,
Gary Lee
  
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Anonymous  #158814  Tue, 15 Nov 05 01:26 PM
 Gary Lee wrote:
Hi Teacher,

Please help me to amend the below letter as in grammar or proper sentence forming.

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Dear Susan,

Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Multimedia Developer with you. Our meeting made me better understand your company’s goal and reaffirmed my belief that this is the organization I would like to work for. As you can see, my experience and qualifications match the requirements you seek. I believe I will produce what exactly the organization/clients require and beyond.

Incidentally, multimedia development is part of my interest in life, since it is a personal interest I’ll be eager to do it with more enthusiasm and willingness and currently I’m improving my English communication skills as it is important for my career prospect.

I appreciate the time you took to interview me. I hope to hear from you soon, and would be pleased to meet with you again for another interview.

Sincerely,
Gary Lee

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