Can you check my Letter of Motivation?

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Anonymous  #510500  Tue, 06 May 08 06:31 PM
Hello everyone!

I need your help..I just finish my letter of motivation for my study abroad semester. Please, can you check the grammar? Any suggestions for the content are also welcome.

I really appreciate your help. If you have any further questions, do not hesitate to ask me.

Thanks a lot!

 

Dear Madam or Sir,

my name is ** ** and I am studying Industrial Engineering and Management at the University of Applied Sciences ***(name)**, **(country)**. I am writing this letter to apply for admission for the Study Abroad program at the **(name)** University of Technology, Australia.

I finished my basic studies back in year 2007 and my 7th semester is supposed to be either a practical training or a Study Abroad semester. I have chosen to apply for one semester at your University in **(city)**.

Having the chance of studying abroad and becoming an engineer have always been the most ambition in my life since young. I like to face the challenges of living in a foreign country and to gain cross-cultural competence. I think that one semester abroad will help me learn how to adapt to a foreign culture, mentality and way of life which in my opinion are very important for broadening one's horizon.

I have never been to Australia before but I know from fellow students that Australians are very open and friendly people. The ** television shows your beautiful countryside and the multicultural appearance of most big cities like **(city)**. So I chose the country wich is the most furthest away from my homeland.

But the reason for choosing especially the ** University for my studies is based on its academic reputation and as well on the offering of courses it provides, which perfectly suit my interests. I also know from your Study Abroad Guide 2008 that the ** University is a very international university, so I would have the opportunity to meet many students from different backgrounds and cultures.

One semester in Australia will also be a great opportunity to improve my English skills. Since graduating from secondary school I regularly read English texts in newspapers, books or on the Internet, but I did not regularly have chances to talk to native speakers. As I am planning to work abroad after my graduation and, as a manager, I would like to be able to speak fluently in conversations.

With my academic background and relevant studying field, I am confidence that I am qualify and able to perform well in this program. I really hope that my application for the Study Abroad program 2008 will be allowed.

 

Yours sincerely,


  
Anonymous  #511591  Fri, 09 May 08 11:50 AM
Recommended changes highlighted in red..

Some omissions were made..

Thanks

MM, UK

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Dear Madam or Sir,

My name is ** ** and I am studying Industrial Engineering and Management at the University of Applied Sciences ***(name)**, **(country)**. I am writing to you to apply for the Study Abroad program at the **(name)** University of Technology, Australia.

 I successfully completed my basic studies back in the year of 2007 and my 7th semester is supposed to be either a practical training or a Study Abroad semester. I have chosen to apply for one semester at your University in **(city)**.

Having the chance of studying abroad and becoming an engineer have always been the most ambition in my life from a very young age. I like to face the challenges of living in a foreign country and to gain cross-cultural competence. I think that one semester abroad will help me learn how to adapt to a foreign culture, mentality and way of life which in my opinion are very important for broadening one's horizon.

I have never been to Australia before but I know from fellow students that Australians are very open and friendly people. The ** television shows your beautiful countryside and the multicultural appearance of most big cities like **(city)**. Therefore, I have chosen the country which is the most furthest away from my homeland.

It is worth noting, however, that I have particularly chosen the ** University for my studies on the basis of academic reputation and the availability of an extensive range of courses that perfectly suit my interests. I also know from your Study Abroad Guide 2008 that the ** University is a very international university, so I would have the opportunity to meet many students from diverse backgrounds and cultures.

Furthermore, one semester in Australia will provide me the opportunity to improve my English skills. Since graduating from secondary school I regularly read English texts in newspapers, books or on the Internet, but I have not, to a great extent, communicated with native speakers. I believe that it is of great essence that I should improve my speaking skills as it is my intent to work abroad after my graduation.

With my academic background and relevant studying field, I am confident that I am qualified and able to perform well in this programme. I would be grateful if my application for the Study Abroad program 2008 is considered and accepted.

 

Yours sincerely,


 

  
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