Can you please check my motivation letter? Thanks in advance..:)

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Kapil Aggarwal  #224778  Fri, 12 May 06 06:47 AM
Thank you very much sir for the help. I would also like to know about the quality of the letter - the coherence, impact etc. or does it need some improvement in that area as well.
  
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Mister Micawber  #224799  Fri, 12 May 06 08:22 AM

Overall, I think it will be fine, Kapil.

  
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Kapil Aggarwal  #225063  Sat, 13 May 06 08:32 AM

Sir, this is research plan I intend to do at the UNIV...plz also help me with this. Plz also comment on whether it looks different enough from my motivation letter (posted earlier) or not. Thanking you again.

Research plan/training to be done at UNIV

I believe that life is not just about sitting and planning rather it is more importantly, about going out and implementing. I want to go to UNIV, France for MBA education because I am interested in exploring the world, looking for opportunities. The knowledge, skills and experiences that I benefit from the UNIV master programme will contribute greatly to my future career.   

My area of interest in management is finance and economics, specifically being stock markets and I am passionate about entrepreneurship. I want to combine my knowledge and interest with my passion and start something of my own in the field of finance. I have an in-depth knowledge of Indian stock markets and for the same reason, I am also a part of core investment team of CCap mutual fund. CCap is a small investment fund founded by students of CURRENTUNIV last year to not only give good return on investment but also to make available a learning platform for the students of CURRENTUNIV. It is only the second fund of its kind among all the B-schools in the country.

At UNIV, I would be taking electives in finance such as futures, options and other derivatives, investment banking, financial intermediation and also courses on entrepreneurship, international business management and emerging market economies. I would also be doing a finance research project on studying the international stock markets. Thus, the master programme would be an extremely valuable learning experience for me and opportunity to carry my two passions in life – stock markets (finance) and entrepreneurship – even further. 

I believe that studying at UNIV would also enhance my skills in adapting to a constantly changing work environment, working individually or in team and maintaining good working relationships with individuals of different cultural backgrounds. Last but not the least, getting selected to represent CURRENTUNIV at UNIV is no mean achievement and a great responsibility in itself – something that I am really looking forward to.

  
Mister Micawber  #225074  Sat, 13 May 06 09:43 AM

Yes, I think it is different enough, Kapil.


Research plan: training to be done at UNIV

Life is not meant to be spent merely sitting and planning; it must be spent going out and implementing.  I want to attend UNIV, France, for my MBA because I am interested in exploring the world and looking for opportunities. The knowledge, skills and experiences that I gain from the UNIV master's programme will contribute greatly to my career.

My area of interest in management is finance and economics, specifically stock markets, and I am passionate about entrepreneurship. I want to combine my knowledge with my passion and start something of my own in the field of finance.  I have an in-depth knowledge of Indian stock markets, and for that reason, I am also a part of the core investment team of CCap Mutual Fund.  CCap is a small investment fund founded by students of CURRENTUNIV last year not only to give good returns on investment but also to make available a learning platform for themselves.  It is only the second fund of its kind among all the B-schools in the country.

At UNIV, I hope to take electives in finance on such subjects as futures, options and other derivatives, investment banking, and financial intermediation, as well as courses in entrepreneurship, international business management and emerging market economies. I also hope to execute a finance research project on international stock markets.  Thus, the master's programme would be an extremely valuable learning experience for me and an opportunity to further pursue my two passions in life – financial stock markets and entrepreneurship.

I believe that studying at UNIV would also enhance my skills in adapting to a constantly changing work environment, working individually and as a team member, and maintaining good working relationships with individuals from different cultural backgrounds. Last but not the least, being selected to represent CURRENTUNIV at UNIV is no mean achievement, and a great responsibility in itself – an honor and a challenge that I am really looking forward to.


  
Anonymous  #288750  Thu, 02 Nov 06 10:36 PM

i need help with a motivation letter i do not know what to begin with Sad [:(] i have to apply for this schoalarship in the Netherlands and i need to send also this motivation letter and i am squeezing my brains and do not know what to write Sad [:(] if somebody can help me and give me some tips ....i would be very grateful

nicoleta

thank you Wink [;)]

  
Anonymous  #474256  Fri, 08 Feb 08 07:50 AM
Please check my motivation letter,i will be very grateful if you do.

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Simeon Kostov, presently a  student in my final year at high school. I am born and raised  in Bulgaria ,in a family in which the most priced values are tolerance and cultural understanding .I have always wanted to get international communication experience and to get know different countries with their unique traditions ,culture ,customs and historical heritage. I  am quite sure that becoming acquainted with another culture and living in a different social environment would broadened my mind and would made me much more independent and capable to face and deal with various issues and challenges .Getting sufficient knowledge is my primary goal and I believe that the best way to achieve it is studying abroad.

  In 2007 Bulgaria became a member of the European Union which gave an opportunity to many talented and ambitious young people to travel and to look for better educational possibilities .I am one of these ambitious youngsters and i am very enthusiastic about the opportunity to apply for the international study program that you offer and to have chance to go abroad to study and work.

  Personally I define myself as dynamic ,adaptable ,conscious and confident person .I am serious goal-oriented individual ,highly motivated to face various challenges .I think that a person should always be ready and well prepared to face and deal with the challenges of the dynamic world in which we live in,that is why I am truly convinced that studying abroad will provide me the invaluable experience and opportunity to develop my communication skills to a high level .Residing in a different social ,cultural , linguistic and bureaucrat environment would enhanced my abilities to solve different and sometimes unexpected problems and would made  me a self-sufficient person .Being an independent ,conscious and responsible person I am sure that I will manage to adapt to a life in a foreign country. My independence and full responsibility for myself have driven me to a higher level of maturity than many of my peers, a quality that differentiates me from many other applicants. Studying and communicating with people from various social  and cultural backgrounds ,according to me are amazing and exciting opportunities .I believe that the communication with other people is not difficult to me, because I am very open, urging for knowledge and sociable person.

 My desire to study in an international environment is one of  the main reasons for my choice to study abroad .The other significant reason for my choice is the quality of the education provided by the European universities. No matter in which specific field you would like to realize yourself after graduating  you would have significant advantage if you have graduated in some of the prestigious European universities.

I am convinced that attending to one of the universities in Denmark will give me great opportunities in the future to become a professional in the field I would like to build up a career.

 Every youngster`s task is to choose the opportunities from all possibilities and according to these,to create a vision of their future. My vision for the future is related to my ambition for getting qualitative knowledge and becoming a professional and I am highly resolute to achieve my goal.

 When you decide to study abroad you need to make yourself acquainted with the country in which you are going to live in. That is why I made some researches for my own concerning all educational possibilities in Denmark. Quite honestly I was astounded when I discovered the various qualitative features of the Danish educational system. I also was impressed by the attractive business climate with high standards in education and research in an international perspective.  I connected with some Bulgarian students studying in Denmark and they gave me detailed information about the advantages and disadvantages in the educational system in Denmark. They also shared with me some of their experiences  concerning their adaptation to the Danish society .I think that the features of the Danish educational system such as active study environments ,the interdisciplinary studies and the project-based activities ,which unfortunately are not features of the Bulgarian educational system, will contribute for providing me of qualitative knowledge and competitive abilities for facing the challenges of an international career .The  Danish educational system prepares you for the real world and helps you to develop your skills that can be used for your professional career. According to me this is very important because a person after his graduation should be very well prepared to deal with the various issues concerning his occupation. Unfortunately the Bulgarian educational system does not provide such an effective and modern way of teaching as the Danish does that is why after many researches I made my crucial choice to study in Denmark where the provocative way of thinking is encouraged and the modern teaching methods take place.

 I have got a clear vision for my future studies. I would like to gain a solid knowledge of cross-cultural and intercultural issues and strategies. I desire to work in the field of international management of multinational companies. Working around capital markets is the career I want. I believe that studying in Denmark will enable me to develop the right professional qualities and to get the most appropriate knowledge needed for becoming a professional, successful and prosperous person.

  Thank you for taking the time to consider my application. I hope that you will be persuaded of my potential to perform well on this English-language study programme. I can be available for interview at any time and look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,Simeon Kostov

  
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