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RAIMI  #177120  Sat, 31 Dec 05 02:43 PM

The Jungle Book by: RUDJARD KIPLING.chemas-microsoft-com:office:office" />>>

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        The Jungle Book story is an interesting story written by RUDJARD KIPLING. The story is about how a human’s baby can survive in the jungle and can live among the wild animals and also about the jungle administration. At the beginning of the story, the author tells us how a family of wolf starts their day. Then, a Tabaqui names Jackal entered the wolf cave and they have a small chitchatting. At the same time, the father of the wolf family feels uncomfortable with Jackal after he said something nice about the wolf cubs.>>

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        In the silent night, suddenly, a noise made by a tiger named SHERE KHAN shocked the wild creatures in the jungle. It sounds like he is struggling with blood sweat and tears. For sure he is hunting for his meal. Actually, he has broken the law of the jungle by changing his place to hunt. On that night, SHERE KHAN will not hunting for a farm-animal, but he is going to hunt a man. >>

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        After that, the father realised that something is walking towards their cave. He prepared to defend his family from other harmful animal. By using his sharp eyes, and his sensitive nose, he knows that the enemy is in the bushes. He jumps towards the bushes to attack the enemy, but, he change his directions after he realised that it is not a harmful enemy, it is just a little naked human’s baby. The baby was named by the mother of wolf as MOWGLI. >>

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        Starting from that, a lot of things has been taught to him and conflicts among the wild because of SHERE KHAN has made MOWGLI make his decision to left the jungle and go back where he used to be, to the human lives but not in the wild.>>

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 I will recommend this book to anybody that asked me for a good story book. It makes me just stick on the chair and read the story until the end.    >>

  
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YoHf  #177126  Sat, 31 Dec 05 03:02 PM

Check your punctuation and your verb tenses... Also remember not to forget "s" after the pronouns he/she/it when using present simple...

Post here again your revision...

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RAIMI  #177510  Sun, 01 Jan 06 01:43 PM

thanks dude but can you please tell me about my mistakes...  it will make me easy to improve my skills furthermore i am not an expert in English...

  
Philologist  #177529  Sun, 01 Jan 06 02:12 PM
How many different versions of this text are there, anyway?! I have seen quite a number of people posting a similar text.

I believe that with his comments in the back of your mind, you could easily improve your text. Finding and correcting your own mistakes is far more beneficial to your English than having others do it.
  
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YoHf  #177563  Sun, 01 Jan 06 04:13 PM

 Philologist wrote:
How many different versions of this text are there, anyway?! I have seen quite a number of people posting a similar text.

Well, Nona and I both think that those writing these 2 essays (The Jungle Book & The Canterville Ghost) are part of the same class...

  
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