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Anonymous  +  414806 Thu, 06 Sep 07 01:36 AM
Hi,

This is a college admissions essay I am writing. It's be really nice if someone could have a look at it and correct the English, as I don't have a good feeling about it.


“Do not march on Moscow” - Monty's Rule 1 on Page 1 in the Book on War regarding Mackinder's geopolitical pivot area is something I still need to find an alternative to, as Charles XII of Sweden, Napoleon and Hitler throughout the course of history have proven that rule to be true, if I want to complete Step 2 of achieving world domination.

One might ask about Step 1, which is gaining control over Europe. Thanks to the European Union, warmongering is out of the question. I guess I'll have to work from within the system, much like Rosa Luxembourg also wanted to overthrow the government and establish a permanent revolution by working within the system, the difference being that I'd rather prefer to live peacefully.

Even though I do enjoy delusions of grandeur, I haven't envisaged step 3 yet. It will probably take a long time to get started anyway with all the Eurosceptics around, who bill be needed to get rid of. I should say that preparing world domination isn't my only interest. I am a very curious person who is particularly interested in history and politics.

In history, the fields which appeal to me most are big (universal) history and the history of civilizations. Even though these two fields have much to do with world domination, my interest is not fuelled by megalomaniac cravings. I look at history to find answers concerning the future, as I am very concerned about the growing instability and the decline of the NATO countries as leaders of the world. Reading how empires in the same situation reacted, both successfully (the Napoleonic Wars increased British power) and unsuccessfully (a ruined economy forced the United Kingdom to pass on the torch to the US after WWII), is very useful when thinking about what we should do in the 21st century to keep the Chinese and Russian at bay.

A great deal of my time is spent towards thinking about politics and other related activities. This summer, I worked at the European Parliament as a trainee in the International Trade department of the European People's Party, which was a great experience as it gave me the opportunity to see the political process of European integration from nearby. I participate in many debates at my school and am subscribed to the Economist and Foreign Policy, which lets me read up on recent events and gives me much material to think about. Academically, international relations is the branch of political science which I prefer and would like to major in at university.

The theories, articles, opinions and books which I enjoy the most are undoubtedly those which combine history and political science, an example being the Democratic Peace Theory proposed by Dean Babst. I consider DPT to be the best possible solution to limiting warfare, but still have to come across a book which contains practical info regarding peaceful regime change.

I also still need to add a strong conclusion. Any ideas?


Thanks a lot,

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