Hi,
This is a college admissions essay I am writing. It's be really nice if someone could have a look at it and correct the English, as I don't have a good feeling about it.
“Do not march on Moscow” - Monty's
Rule 1 on Page 1 in the Book on War regarding Mackinder's
geopolitical pivot area is something I still need to find an
alternative to, as Charles XII of Sweden, Napoleon and Hitler
throughout the course of history have proven that rule to be true, if
I want to complete Step 2 of achieving world domination.
One might ask about Step 1, which is
gaining control over Europe. Thanks to the European Union,
warmongering is out of the question. I guess I'll have to work from
within the system, much like Rosa Luxembourg also wanted to overthrow
the government and establish a permanent revolution by working within
the system, the difference being that I'd rather prefer to live
peacefully.
Even though I do enjoy delusions of
grandeur, I haven't envisaged step 3 yet. It will probably take a
long time to get started anyway with all the Eurosceptics around, who
bill be needed to get rid of. I should say that preparing world
domination isn't my only interest. I am a very curious person who is
particularly interested in history and politics.
In history, the fields which appeal to
me most are big (universal) history and the history of civilizations.
Even though these two fields have much to do with world domination,
my interest is not fuelled by megalomaniac cravings. I look at
history to find answers concerning the future, as I am very concerned
about the growing instability and the decline of the NATO countries
as leaders of the world. Reading how empires in the same situation
reacted, both successfully (the Napoleonic Wars increased British
power) and unsuccessfully (a ruined economy forced the United Kingdom
to pass on the torch to the US after WWII), is very useful when
thinking about what we should do in the 21st century to
keep the Chinese and Russian at bay.
A great deal of my time is spent
towards thinking about politics and other related activities. This
summer, I worked at the European Parliament as a trainee in the
International Trade department of the European People's Party, which
was a great experience as it gave me the opportunity to see the
political process of European integration from nearby. I participate
in many debates at my school and am subscribed to the Economist and
Foreign Policy, which lets me read up on recent events and gives me
much material to think about. Academically, international relations
is the branch of political science which I prefer and would like to
major in at university.
The theories, articles, opinions and
books which I enjoy the most are undoubtedly those which combine
history and political science, an example being the Democratic Peace
Theory proposed by Dean Babst. I consider DPT to be the best possible
solution to limiting warfare, but still have to come across a book
which contains practical info regarding peaceful regime change.
I also still need to add a strong conclusion. Any ideas?
Thanks a lot,