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Abil  +  555808 Sun, 17 Aug 08 11:56 AM
We walked for about 10 hours at a stretch with a short break for a rest halfway through. I cannot remember how many hills we climbed up and down and how many streams we crossed before we reached a small house on the top of a stiff hill. It was in the fag end of the winter, and at nine the sun was shining brightly. All of us were beginning to sweat profusely. The guerrillas were used to such kind of hard work, and they did not show any fatigue or tiredness. On the other hand, I was tired to the death and feeling extremely hungry. When we reached the house, it was already 2 pm. The family of the house was supposed to keep our meals ready. But as bad luck would have it, the messenger whom the guerrillas had sent in advance did not reach there at all. However, the householder was kind-hearted, and immediately set in work to prepare food for us. I will never forget the hospitality the family provided to us. This was the first time I knew what hunger is. Now I fully understand why "hunger" is called the greatest illness, and why the Palestinian poet Mahmoud Darwish (died a few days ago) wrote: "Beware of my hunger!"

Are there any mistakes? Thanks.
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26TMNTJG2PG  +  555827 Sun, 17 Aug 08 01:20 PM
We walked for about 10 hours at in a stretch with a short break for a rest halfway through. I cannot remember how many hills we climbed up and down and how many streams we crossed before we reached a small house on the top of a stiff hill. It was in the fag end of the winter, and at nine the sun was shining brightly. All of us were beginning to sweat profusely. The guerrillas were used to such kind of hard work, and they did not show any signs of fatigue or tiredness. On the other hand, I was tired to the death dead tired and feeling extremely hungry. When we reached the house, it was already 2 pm. The family of the house was supposed to keep get our meals ready. But as bad luck would have it, the messenger whom the guerrillas had sent in advance did had not reach there arrived at all. However, the householder was kind-hearted, and immediately set in work to prepare food for us. I will never forget the hospitality the family provided to us. This was is the first time I knew begin to realise what hunger is. Now, I fully understand why "hunger" is called the greatest illness, and why the Palestinian poet Mahmoud Darwish (who died a few days ago) wrote: "Beware of my hunger!"
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Abil  +  555884 Sun, 17 Aug 08 05:20 PM
26TMNTJG2PG
“We walked for about 10 hours at in a stretch with a short break for a rest halfway through.”


Thanks TMNPJG, but I have a few questions.

I am not satisfied with your corrections to the first sentence. What is wrong with "at a stretch"? And I still think "with a short break for a rest" is fine. We can also use "save" instead of "with" and "one short break" instead of "a short break". What is your opinion?


26TMNTJG2PG
“This was is the first time I knew begin to realise what hunger is.”


Do you think present tense works in this sentence despite the fact that the realization came to me in the past?
26TMNTJG2PG  +  556065 Mon, 18 Aug 08 09:37 AM
 'in a stretch' to mean 'in a continuous length of time'; while 'at a stretch' sounds strange to me.

with a short break for a rest - I used fewer words to have the same meaning and to sound natural.

We can also use "save" instead of "with" and "one short break" instead of "a short break". What is your opinion? Yes, we can.

"save one short break for a rest" or "save a short rest" halfway through - which one sounds more natural?  In fact, through can be deleted without affecting the meaning.

Do you think present tense works in this sentence despite the fact that the realization came to me in the past? Yes.

Historical present tense is used because the feelings from the experience ramain the same up to the moment of writing.


Abil, 1 yr 97 days ago
Thanks TMNTJG for your clarification.
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