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BW2/3  #386617  Sun, 01 Jul 07 03:25 PM

Sitting in the smell and dirty train station, he felt in nausea. John was waiting for the train impatiently and murmured some fifthly words whatever came up. As he was sitting there, he saw more people walking to the bench. Most of them are wet, too. He greeted one of his coworkers warmly. His coworker was Jane, who worked in social work department. He had the feeling that she was interested in him because he almost saw her every time in the building cafeteria when he was there. Although she was pretty, she was very quite. Sometimes John ran out of words to talk with her and then became awkward. She was from the old school, dressing very conservative. John had never seen her with makeup. Sometimes John wondered how come she liked him. Jane was not wet because she had an umbrella with her. She asked him how his day was. He said it was usual except his coworker had gotten the promotion. He envied him very much because they started the same day.

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Chevy Bel Air 01  #386638  Sun, 01 Jul 07 04:27 PM

Sitting in a dirty and SMELLING train station, he felt in nausea. John was waiting for the train impatiently and murmured some (fifthly words?) whatever CAME TO HIM. WHILE he was sitting there, he saw A LOT OF people walking to the bench. Most of them WERE wet, too. He greeted one of his coworkers warmly. His coworker was Jane who worked in social work department. He had the feeling that she was interested in him because SHE LOOKED AT HIM EVERY TIME IN THE CAFETERIA when he was there. She was pretty and very quite.Sometimes John ran out of words WHILE HE WAS TALKING with her and then HE BECOMES awkward. HE KNEW HER from school- dressing very conservative. John had never seen her with makeup. Sometimes John wondered WHETHER SHE WOULD LIKE HIM. Jane was not wet because she had an umbrella with her. She asked him how his day was. He said it was (usual WHAT DO YOU WANT SAY?) except his coworker had gotten the promotion. He envied him very much because they started the same day TO WORK.

  
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