pleasehelp  +  962197 Thu, 05 Nov 09 07:03 AM He dreamt of walking in a flowering wood where birds flew before them he and the child and the sky was/were aching blue but he was learning how to wake himself from just such siren worlds. It was written with was but shouldn't it be were? pleasehelp Joined on Sun, Sep 20 2009 Regular Member 614 Sentences

	Ivanhr  +  962211 Thu, 05 Nov 09 07:22 AM  The 'was' probably refers only to the sky and not to the 'he and the child' (they're without a verb). I can't be sure of that but it seems possible to me. This is not entirely uncommon in poetry. Ivanhr Joined on Fri, Oct 2 2009 Full Member 176 Writing, Sentences, Poetry

	pleasehelp  +  962635 Thu, 05 Nov 09 06:24 PM Anyone else have any suggestions? pleasehelp Sentences

	pleasehelp  +  962991 Fri, 06 Nov 09 02:40 AM pleasehelp “He dreamt of walking in a flowering wood where birds flew before them he and the child and the sky was/were aching blue but he was learning how to wake himself from just such siren worlds. It was written with was but shouldn't it be were? ” Where are the grammar wizards? pleasehelp Sentences

	pleasehelp  +  963839 Sat, 07 Nov 09 12:31 AM He dreamt of walking in a flowering wood where birds flew before them he and the child and the sky was/were aching blue but he was learning how to wake himself from just such siren worlds. It was written with was but shouldn't it be were? pleasehelp Sentences

	Avangi  +  963885 Sat, 07 Nov 09 02:13 AM Yes.  The child and the sky were aching blue.  ?? Okay, He dreamt of walking in a flowering wood where birds flew. Don't we need some punctuation here?  Does "before them" go with "flew," or with "he and the child"? "Where birds flew before them," or "Before them, he and the child and the sky were aching blue." "But he was learning how to wake himself from just such siren worlds," stands perfectly well on its own. The junction around the word "before" needs to be fixed.  I don't know what you mean. Avangi Joined on Mon, Nov 19 2007 Veteran Member 8,172 ". . . le plaisir delicieux et toujours nouveau d'une occupation inutile." - Henri de Regnier Punctuation, Writing, Sentences

	pleasehelp  +  964023 Sat, 07 Nov 09 05:59 AM Avangi “Don't we need some punctuation here?  Does "before them" go with "flew," or with "he and the child"?” It's written without any punctuation and was is used in the book not were before aching blue... pleasehelp Punctuation, Writing, Sentences

	Avangi  +  964090 Sat, 07 Nov 09 08:04 AM I think you need to decide what it is you're trying to do with this thing.  If it's completely free from rules, then how can you fix it? (Actually, I was under the impression you had written it.) Avangi Sentences

	pleasehelp  +  964098 Sat, 07 Nov 09 08:18 AM Sentence is from a book called The Road by Cormac McCarthy. pleasehelp Sentences