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Anonymous  #319522  Thu, 25 Jan 07 12:07 AM
Could anyone please mark this composition for me? It doesn't have to be polite or formal, thank you so much Wink [;)]

My physics teacher

 

The best teacher I have ever had was a friendly and middle aged woman and her name was Blanca. She wanted to work for NASA in the US as an aerospace engineer, she liked everything connected to space, stars…, but she couldn’t and had to work at my high school.

Although she taught physics using a usual boring book, the lessons weren’t so boring as they used to be until she became my teacher because she told a lot of jokes about what we were studying.

I got high marks on physics because she explained really well and it was not necessary to study.

Unfortunately, nowadays I have another physics teacher, I wish Blanca was back.




I'm not sure whether the last sentence is ok or not, beacuse of the tense. It is going to be marked by an american english teacher, I don't know if it's useful for you.


Thank you so much Wink [;)]

  
Clive  #319636  Thu, 25 Jan 07 05:33 AM

Hi,

My physics teacher

 The best teacher I have ever had was a friendly and middle-aged woman whose name was Blanca. She wanted to work for NASA in the US as an aerospace engineer. She liked everything connected to space, stars and so on, but she couldn’t get a job with NASA so she had to work at my high school.

Although she taught physics using a usual boring book, the lessons weren’t as boring as they used to be beforel she became my teacher, because she told a lot of jokes about what we were studying.

I got high marks in physics because she explained really well and it was not necessary to study.

Unfortunately, nowadays I have another physics teacher. I wish Blanca was back.

You can't just join two sentences by using a comma instead of a period at the end of the first one. You have to use a joining word, or else make it two sentences.Smile [:)]

Best wishes, Clive

  
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Emib  #319664  Thu, 25 Jan 07 08:19 AM
Thank very much Clive, just one question, I've realised that the last sentence may be wrong: "I wish Blanca was back."

Shouldn't it be " I wish Blanca were back"? Beacuse it is the subjuntive. Maybe I'm wrong, hehe.
  
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Clive  #319790  Thu, 25 Jan 07 02:34 PM

Hi,

'Was' is commonly used and accepted. It often suggests there is at least some possibility that the wish may come true. 'Were' is fine, but tends to make the style seem rather more formal, and stresses the fact that the wish is not going to come true.

Best wishes again, Clive

  
Emib  #319836  Thu, 25 Jan 07 03:58 PM
 Clive wrote:

Hi,

'Was' is commonly used and accepted. It often suggests there is at least some possibility that the wish may come true. 'Were' is fine, but tends to make the style seem rather more formal, and stresses the fact that the wish is not going to come true.

Best wishes again, Clive



Thank you again and again ^^.

Look at what I found on the net:


She wishes she were not here.
The modern usage She wishes she was is incorrect.


It says it's incorrect but also used.

  
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