I have underlined some problem areas, vocabulary or grammar, and added some notes after some. All in all, your presentation is not very humane:My work: (Am I right to write "my work" here?-- No)
Were I an influential member of the government, I would help the
parentless children to make their lives better. In this essay, I will
aslo describe some of the problems that confront these people and
discuss what measure I will take to improve their situation. (You have no thesis statement.)
Parentless children, or orphans, (No need for the apposition of 2 common words) normally lead miserable lives due
to the lack of education and materials. Obviously there are some
orphanges but not every child has the chance to live in. It is time the
government did something about the problem.(Irrelevant to the question) One of the measures I
suggest is to build more and more orphanages, the more the better.
Secondly, the government will have to gather groups of those orphans
and send them right away to orphanages. Every child will have chance to
go to vocational school to learn. However, before we did all the
things, we should found charity funds and add a small amount of taxes
called "charity taxes" to every adult. They have to pay it without
exception. A charity fund might well be operated every other month and
the taxes come once a year. Some may not want to pay, so we have to
make them pay at all costs. The tax can be fluctuating from two
hundreds to five hundreds Viet Nam dong and I think that is an
acceptable amount for almost every adult.
To sum up, I-the governor will put all of the measures above in
operation, perhaps after a vote (Irrelevant to the question). Everyone bears in their minds that
even orphans have the child rights so we cannot ignore them all. We
should help them at all costs and train them to be the workforce of our
country.