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YOSEF  #598752  Sat, 29 Nov 08 02:09 PM

Introduction

 

 

 

This is a personal writing essay, in this essay I am willing to introduce me self and to give my thought’s. This is also to give a brief idea about my life, my future and opinions on the 21 century world I hope you enjoy it and know more about me.

 

 

 

My Life

On the 19th of May 1993, what a shocking day, what a startling month and what a appalling Day for my family. This the  day when my family crisis started. On this day I was born on this day my grandfather died. On this month when my dad lost what he’s got and he is a poor man. On this day I was happy as much as my family were sad, because I was brought in to the glorious world. I was lucky on this day since I didn’t understand what was happening so I didn’t need to be sad.

On the 19th of June 1993 exactly after a month I was born and a month my grandfather died, this is when my family remembered to name me HAZEM.

 

I was born in a very holly place for christens Muslims and Jewish it’s in Palestine, in the city of Jerusalem. That’s where I lived for the first year of my life.

 

After my dad’s father died and my dad lost all he owns from Land, houses, shops, and businesses. When I was two years my parents fled my Palestine to Britain (Scotland) were they started again from Zero. My dad worked as history teacher and mum as a nurse.

 

I grew up in my early years in the city of Glasgow, in a area full of criminals. At the age of 5 I started primary school at a Carnwadrcik Primary School. From this point and onwards learned/discovered so much in life I learned what was wrong and right . I learned who to talk too , who to walk with, who to respect  and who to backup. I honour who respected me. I care for a friend much more then he doe’s. I always wanted to find a friend to share secrets, matters and joy.

I would give everything to a best friend, just to make our relation more then friends. I hate who extorts or forces to me to do something. I like a trustee friend who will be there for you when you need him.

 

Secondary school,

I have moved from primary school to secondary school. In secondary school life was much difficult and much more fun. My school was Shawlands Academy. At this school I saw life much closer. I had to battle, argue, win, and lose to show my self. I think that’s what every boy did when started secondary school.

At this school I tried to learn from people, under stand people and show people what I can do.

I was a funny boy who always been friendly with teacher and respected them because teachers are just like parents!

In the past years I went through a lot exciting things and a lot I am embarrassed about because they were too childish. Each year I grow I realized that I learned something new.

 

At school I wasn’t great at football as other’s were but I was better then others to express and argue the rest , by acting in front of whole school and others I obtained a lot of self confidence. I was able express my self in way I didn’t realize through drama.

 

At the third of my school life I had gained good acknowledged of who are my friends and who are my enemies.  At this point of my life I felt like a growing up. I felt like I am something in this world and I can stand and talk, imagine I can argue and love.

 

Writing poems were on the thing to show my imagination. Arguing and under standing gave me more confidence to wards life. 

 

 

My opinion,

One of the things I actually correspond is giving my opinion in all sort of thing.

These are just few main points I intent to give my opinion on.

Starting with Britain, what a great country, what a great democracy and what great people, but still it got much to improve and modify. I really like the idea of the parliament and voting, and the past post system which makes a great democratic county again! I think every body in Britain has got a peace of mind in weather to be what ever you wish and what ever religion you want. I am pleased with the way it deals with the poor, like the idea of giving benefits, Job seekers allowance and pensions. Nevertheless Britain has got a some problem with the outside world, which could be solved in many way, but not wars!

I don’t like the history of Britain especially to the external world, I don’t like there empires over the world and the way it sorted out countries in the past, and lift crisis behind (PAELSTINE).

My opinion on religion is it absolute great  no matter what it is. If someone follows a religion it mean he has goals in life and determent to do it  in good ways to get his god honoured. Likewise having religion makes you follow Laws or something in good way. It also gives the government more control over people.

 

My opinion on Politics.

Politics means so much to me, it mean having power in democratic way to change something to the better. If I became a prim minister one day my political quote will be   I am not perfect but I will rise to every occasions, I am not weak but I will stand firm against any action that violates our freedom, I am not smart but I will consult those around me for the best possible solutions to our problems, and I am not wise but I am to Britain.  Whatever resources under my power to make sure we preserve the dream that is one Britain”.

I really like politics because you can hear, understand, argue and approach a solution at the end (I hate been violent). I don’t like the idea  mixing religion with politics!

 

My opinion on Business,

I think the government should take over all the private businesses so it makes life fair. I detest the Capitalism system which unnfortunly most countries us for the business. I don’t like the capitalism system because it makes the rich richer and the poorer. 

 

 

My opinion on education,

The only thing I would say is that Education is the main Key the world (Business Education etc).

 

 

 

My Future Life

 

For the time being, the only thing I got is to continue my education and hopefully higher education.

 

I always demanded to become a lawyer to defend people and get others there rights.

I AM SORRY BECAUSE THE ESSAY IS TOO LONG.

THANK YOU

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julielai  #604826  Thu, 04 Dec 08 06:14 PM

I don't see a lot of connections between the sections.  e.g. How did your background shape the way you think about these various issues?

  
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