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My First Visit to Knotts Berry Farm
After
a long week of church conferences at Anaheim, Los Angeles with other church committees from Texas, Michigan and Florida, our pastors decided to take us to an amusement park. We children
were very excited. We debated which amusement park to go to. The majority of us
wanted to go to Disneyland, but the tickets
were too expensive because of the summer season. Our church did not have the
budgets for the tickets, so we decided to go to Knotts Berry Farm instead. I
felt a little disappointed, because I really wanted
to go to Disneyland, but I heard that Knotts
Berry Farm had many rides too. We all crammed like sardines in two vans and a
car. As we arrived at the Knott’s Berry Farm front gate, we saw the loops,
twists, and drops of the Silver Bullet machine.
I was so excited, but at the same time I felt so scared because I had never been on a roller
coaster before. While waiting for our pastors to park the cars, we took pictures at the front gate. After we bought
the tickets, we all rushed in. The place was fantastic.
There were so many rides and souvenir shops everywhere.
The
first ride we went on was the Silver Bullet. While waiting in line, I saw
people screaming. Suddenly I felt scared and shaken. We climbed aboard and
pulled down the safety rail. It made me more scared when the floor was removed. This ride was
a floorless steel coaster that flipped upside down. As I looked down, I saw the
entire amusement park. My heart was beating so hard and my legs started to
shake. I felt extremely terrified, since I am afraid of heights. At that moment
I wanted to get out of my seat and go home. The ride started slowly until it
reached the top, then it rushed down in loops and twists. I felt as I was falling down from a
high building and I almost fainted.
For the entire ride I closed my eyes and kept my head down. I held my
sister’s hand tightly and screamed. At that moment I thought, “What if the
safety rail drops out? I might be killed” I realized that I was being silly
thinking about such things. The ride lasted about two minutes. I made myself
open my eyes and I looked down without being scared. There were loops everywhere,
which seemed to be turning very quickly. When the ride was over, I felt very
dizzy; and I couldn’t walk straight and I almost threw up. The ride was
extremely scary but at the same time it was extremely exciting.
Boomerang
was our second ride of the day. Boomerang consists of a single train with seven
cars. The ride begins when the train is pulled backwards from the station and
up a lift hill, before being released. Some of us were still dizzy from the
Silver Bullet coaster, but we still wanted to experience the Boomerang. We ran
to the wait in line with the others. The wait was not long. The ride was
extremely fun. This ride wasn’t as scary as the first ride. My cousins and some
other kids wanted to go on a second time, but I said we should try a few of the
other rides. A few rides later, we were tired and hungry. We bought some burger
and fries, which were a little expensive, but we had no choice. We ate them by
a fountain in the picnic area, under the cool shade of the tree. After lunch, a
few rides were closed. So my sister, cousin, and I went to the Snoopy Show
while the others were busy looking for other rides. At the Snoopy Show, the
majority of the audiences were kids. I felt a bit embarrassed since we are too
old for the Snoopy Show. The show was awesome. It had a lot of dancing and
singing. I was very impressed with the dancers, and of course with Snoopy.
After
the show, we walked around taking pictures. We
went to Snoopy’s camp. We took pictures with the mascot Snoopy and other
characters, it was really fun. We also went to a souvenir store to buy some
souvenirs. I spent ten minutes looking at the stuffs. I could not decide what I
should buy, everything was beautiful and unique. I ended up buying a T-shirt
and a key chain. Time was running fast; very soon it was three o’clock. We
decided to ride a Calico Mine Ride, which is a very slow train ride. Most of
the passengers were old people. The train descends into the dark depths of
Knotts very own gold mine. It was a little boring because it moved so slowly. I
fell asleep on the ride. When the ride was over we decided to use the restroom
to freshen up. After using the restroom, we headed to the front gate which was
our meeting place. We saw our pastor waiting for us. Our pastor seem very tired
from all the rides. He bought Knotts Berry Farm T-shirts for us, which I had just bought earlier at the souvenir shop. We
invited him to ride another roller coaster. He said that he just wanted to go
home and sleep. We were all tired but happy we wore the Knotts’ T-shirt as we made our way back to
the vans. I’ll never forget this experience.