Please correct my resume again

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Prawit-_-  #503178  Mon, 21 Apr 08 03:01 AM

Please correct the sentence in work experience section of my resume as below.                           

  • Assisted in safety pillar activities to receive the Award for TPM Excellence.

 

Thank you.

Prawit

  
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Clive  #503180  Mon, 21 Apr 08 03:12 AM

Hi,

Please correct the sentence in work experience section of my resume as below.                           

  • Assisted in safety pillar activities and received the Award for TPM Excellence.

I don't know waht a 'safety pillar' is. Are you sure this is the correct term?

Best wishes, Clive

  
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Prawit-_-  #503238  Mon, 21 Apr 08 07:33 AM

Thank you for your suggestion.

Can I write "Assisted in safety activities to achieve the Award for TPM Excellence."?

I would like to show recruitment managers that my company got the award and I involved in safety activies.

Regards,

Prawit

 

 

  
Clive  #503339  Mon, 21 Apr 08 01:17 PM

Hi,

You normally receive an award. Or you could say gain.

Clive

  
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