Please correct the short writing of mine.

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Lcchang  #431451  Tue, 16 Oct 07 05:30 PM

What has been on my mind

Well there is actually not a lot on my mind. It is just that my son really pisses me off sometimes. First I think he is neither like my wife nor like me who always keep ourselves active in things we are working on. In stead, he always lacks ambitions to care about stuff around him, yet which can be for the well-being of him. Moreover, it appears that things like watching TV and playing on-line games can only provoke his interest. At times I feel so frustrated being his old man, and I am hoping that he really could think about how to improve his life as well as school studies.

  
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Clive  #431483  Tue, 16 Oct 07 06:13 PM

Hi,

Here are a few edits.

What has been on my mind

Well, there is actually not a lot on my mind. It is just that my son really pisses <<< this marks this as very informal writing - and even informally, note that this term offends quite a lot of people me off sometimes. First, I think he is neither like my wife nor like me. We always keep ourselves active in things we are working on. Instead, he lacks ambition to care about stuff around him, which nevertheless can be good for him. Moreover, it appears that only things like watching TV and playing on-line games can arouse his interest. At times I feel so frustrated being his old man, and I hope that he really thinks about how to improve his life as well as his school studies.

Best wishes, Clive

  
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Lcchang  #431654  Wed, 17 Oct 07 03:48 AM

Thanks Clive, but my son really pisses me off sometimes. I know I wouldn't say this to others. Nice day.

LCChang

  
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