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Jackson6612  #369130  Wed, 23 May 07 02:01 AM

Please make corrections/edits to the following paragraphs.

Paragraph 1:

I know it does not seem nice to ask you for this favour, but I have no one else to ask for this. If you could not do that, then there is nothing to worry about. I need some information from X University. I cannot speak English, so if I tell you my problem then would you call X and ask them few questions?

Paragraph 2:

That's very kind of you. Phone number to be called is 123456. On this page you can find additional information. I think programme I am inquiring about is called Y Course. Please ask them these questions:

1: Are they still offering this programme?

2: Can international students also apply for this programme?

3: Can one get admission into Electrical Engineering Programme of X University after completing that Y Course?

4: If they have stopped offering that Y course, then please ask them about any other university which is offering such a programme?

I'm extremely grateful for your this favour.

Paragraph 3:

Thank you very much. You are a very kind person. Please remember to ask all those questions, because answers to those questions can change someone's life.

Thanks a lot. I hope they pick up the phone in this year.

Paragraph 4:

I have emailed them two weeks ago, when I asked you to call them. They didn't reply to that email. Try to call them one or two times, if they don't answer, forget it. It's okay then. Thanks a lot for taking so much trouble of calling them repeatedly.

  
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Jackson6612  #369400  Wed, 23 May 07 04:52 PM
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Feebs11  #373334  Fri, 01 Jun 07 12:56 AM
 Jackson6612 wrote:

Please make corrections/edits to the following paragraphs.

Paragraph 1:

I know it does not seem nice to ask you for this favour, but I have no one else to ask for this. I need some information from X University. I cannot speak English, so if I tell you my problem, then would you call X and ask them few questions?  If you cannot do it, then there is nothing to worry about.

Paragraph 2:

That's very kind of you. The phone number to be called is 123456. On this page you can find additional information. I think the programme I am inquiring about is called Y Course. Please ask them these questions:

1: Are they still offering this programme?

2: Can international students also apply for this programme?

3: Can one get admission into Electrical Engineering Programme of X University after completing that Y Course?

4: If they have stopped offering that Y course, then please ask them about any other university which is offering such a programme?

I'm extremely grateful to you for this favour.

Paragraph 3:

Thank you very much. You are a very kind person. Please remember to ask all those questions, because answers to those questions can change someone's life.

Thanks a lot. I hope they pick up the phone in this year. [What does this mean>or are you making a joke?]

Paragraph 4:

I had emailed them two weeks ago, when I asked you to call them. They didn't reply to that email. Please try to call them one or two times. If they don't answer, forget it. It's okay then. Thanks a lot for taking so much trouble.

  
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Jackson6612  #373704  Fri, 01 Jun 07 07:13 PM
 Feebs11 wrote:

Paragraph 3:

Thank you very much. You are a very kind person. Please remember to ask all those questions, because answers to those questions can change someone's life.

Thanks a lot. I hope they pick up the phone in this year. [What does this mean>or are you making a joke?]

Yes, I was making a joke. Thanks a lot for helping me. I wish you good health and many years of happiness.

Kind regards, Jackson

  
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