Hi, could you please check the structure and grammar of my motivation letter for PhD scholarship, and advice me if something is wrong?
Thanks in advance.
Dear Sirs,
With this letter, I would kindly like to introduce my candidacy for the XYZ Scholarship for PhD studies for foreign students. This scholarship will help me to further develop my knowledge, improve my skills and to continue with my bioengineering research activities as well as design of novel products for helping elderly and physically impaired people. This research is my passion and my life's work, because I am confident that it is noble.
I have got a degree of Bachelor and Master of Science in 2001 and 2002 respectively from the Faculty XY at University XY in XY. I was awarded with best student award from this University. During my studies and high school I have participated on many international competitions in problems solving from mathematics, physics and informatics and I have won over 30 awards and medals, as well as prestigious international award for young researchers XYZ.
My studies were focused mainly on the basic and advanced knowledge of applied informatics and robotics, especially on the bioengineering. I am particularly interested in research related to creating and control of assisting (orthosis, prosthetic) devices for people with disabilities (multiple and lateral sclerosis, spinal cord injuries, etc.). Therefore, I have endeavored to upgrade my education in the field of biomechanics by approaching some novel methods and protocols for creating Brain Computer Interface (BCI) and devices control with EEG signals, when taking part in several international projects. During this time, I have got some encouraged achievements: publish and co-publish 6 scientific papers and acquire advanced and practical knowledge.
As a part of the exchange program during my last project *** I have spent 10 months of research at Department XYZ at University XYZ. I was fascinated by your country, its culture and way of life. I was very satisfied with the research possibilities, pleasant working atmosphere and people’s kindness as well as with the result that we accomplished on this project.
Encouraged from this I have decided to enter in the PhD research program at this University. I successfully passed the PhD Entrance exam with top grades.
I am aware that my knowledge is still limited in many areas. Thus, I hope that through these PhD studies I will have the opportunity, to put my knowledge into a higher standard. My plan is to continue already started activities and experimental work, which will finally, result with solving of some well-known bioengineering problems and innovations that will lead toward social integration of elderly and disabled people.
In addition to my academic activities, I have also experienced a task of a general manager in a high-tech IT Company. It helped me to develop a strong analytical mind and interpersonal skills. Moreover, I learned the value of teamwork and became more solution-oriented, adapting to a constantly changing work environment and maintaining good working relationships with individuals of different cultural backgrounds. My knowledge of several languages is also my strong characteristic.
In regard to my extracurricular activities, I like photography and traveling.
I understand that admission to the XYZ Scholarship is competitive, but I am also confident that I am qualified and eager, and prepared to meet all of its challenges. I would be most grateful if you could give my application your most favorable consideration.
Yours truly,