[title]Family quotes[/title] [description]Welcome to our family quotes section! Here you'll find some of the funniest (and wisest) quotes on the subject of family life![/description]
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chiara  +  371247 Sun, 27 May 07 06:10 PM

Hello, could you please check my writing? Any suggestion and piece of advice is very welcome.

Thank you, Chiara

Would you like to improve your English and meet new friends? Then you would defenitely enjoy taking

part to our college's International Exchange Programm.

I've recently been in Canada for four weeks. My host family was really nice. Tom and I immediately became very good friends. We still write to eachothers and I look forward to see him as soon as possible.

I choosed a four week journey, but you can stay up to eight weeks, if you wish. I think the shorter journey was the perfect one for me, otherwise I'm sure I would have started to feel homesick.

Although, my host family was really nice and I couldn't expect to meet a better one, social life was not that great. There was not a lot to do in the area in the evenings. So, we usually stayed at home.

But my host family brought me to see the area surroundings and that was the best part of my journey. We went to the Rocky Mountains which are really nice. We camped in a very big camping provided of all kinds of facilities like swimming-pools and tennis-courts and in one of our trip to the mountains' natural parks I could see bears. I never saw them before, it was so exciting!

Only a couple of things of my journey went wrong. The travel costs were higher then I expected and the pocket money I brought with me wasn't enough. So, if you decide going, check the travel costs first and bring more money for the weekly expenses, not to feel worried all the time and to avoid asking for money to your host family.

Beside those things, I wish you can join the Interational Exchange Programm, because it is really worth it!  

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Feebs11  +  371360 Mon, 28 May 07 12:48 AM

Would you like to improve your English and meet new friends? Then you would defenitely enjoy taking part to our college's International Exchange Programm.

I've recently been in Canada for four weeks. My host family was really nice. Tom and I immediately became very good friends. We still write to eachothers and I look forward to see him as soon as possible.

I choosed a four week journey, but you can stay up to eight weeks, if you wish. I think the shorter journey was the perfect one for me, otherwise I'm sure I would have started to feel homesick.

Although, my host family was really nice and I couldn't expect to meet a better one, social life was not that great. There was not a lot to do in the area in the evenings. So, we usually stayed at home.

But my host family brought me to see the area surroundings and that was the best part of my journey. We went to the Rocky Mountains which are really nice. We camped in a very big camping provided of all kinds of facilities like swimming-pools and tennis-courts and in one of our trip to the mountains' natural parks I could see bears. I never saw them before, it was so exciting!

Only a couple of things of my journey went wrong. The travel costs were higher then I expected and the pocket money I brought with me wasn't enough. So, if you decide going, check the travel costs first and bring more money for the weekly expenses, not to feel worried all the time and to avoid asking for money to your host family.

Beside those things, I wish you can join the Interational Exchange Programm, because it is really worth it!  

 Errors in red.

"journey" is not the right term here - a journey is something you do when travelling. Alternative words you could use are trip/visit/stay

You need to check your punctuation and spelling

Check the meanings of "bring" and "take"

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Anonymous, 2 yr 182 days ago

Hello Feebs, thank you very much for your help. I tried to correct the parts you underlined. If you can check them, I would be very grateful.

Chiara

defenitely... definitly

Programm... Programme

take part to... in?

eachothers... eachother? May it also be plural?

see him... meet him? Or seeing him?

journey... as you suggested me: trip, visit etc.

Although,... here I don't understand. Is it red because of the comma?

my... host family     Should it be "the"?  

So, we usually stayed at home... No comma?

But my host family brought me to see the area surroundings and that... I'm not supposed to start a sentence with "but", but it is difficult for me to substitute it with other  words.  Could I say "fortunately" for example? ...

Fortunately the host family took me to visit the surroundings... ?  

provided of ... full of?

 in one of our trip to...  During a trip to...?

I never saw them before, it... I never saw them before. It... ?

I brought with me... I took with me.               And bring more money... take

things of my journey... of my trip, stay etc.

So, if you... So if you...

I wish... I hope

 

Feebs11  +  371568 Mon, 28 May 07 01:26 PM
 Anonymous wrote:

Hello Feebs, thank you very much for your help. I tried to correct the parts you underlined. If you can check them, I would be very grateful.

Chiara

defenitely... definitely  [definite + ly]

Programm... ProgrammeYes [Y]

take part to... in?Yes [Y]

eachothers... eachother? May it also be plural?  TWO words! and singular.

see him... meet him? Or seeing him? meet

journey... as you suggested to me: trip, visit etc.

Although,... here I don't understand. Is it red because of the comma?  Yes

my... host family     Should it be "the"?  

So, we usually stayed at home... No comma?Yes [Y]

But my host family brought me to see the area surroundings and that... I'm not supposed to start a sentence with "but", but it is difficult for me to substitute it with other  words.  Could I say "fortunately" for example? ...

Fortunately the host family took me to visit the surroundings... ?  Much better

provided of ... full of? or "provided with"

 in one of our trip to...  During a trip to...? Yes [Y]

I never saw them before, it... I never saw them before. It... ?Yes [Y]

I brought with me... I took with me.               And bring more money... take Yes [Y]

things of my journey... of my trip, stay etc.

So, if you... So if you...Yes [Y]

I wish... I hopeYes [Y]

 

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Anonymous, 2 yr 181 days ago

Thank you very much again,

Chiara

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