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Latest post Sun, Jul 12 2009 6:06 AM by julielai. 1 replies.
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lucas21c  +  809469 Mon, 06 Jul 09 11:33 PM
I translated an article into English. But I think probably there are some faults. Please correct it.

Thanks.

 

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The last deceased in Berlin Wall

 

Chris Gueffroy was gunshot at Berlin Wall in February 1989. It was the last decesed that a DDR(East Germany) citizen paid his trying the escape to the West with his life. In November 1989 the Berlin Wall occurred.

  

An fatal errors brought Chris Gueffroy to the Idea to dare his escape-trial out of DDR in February 1989. An familiar Soldier told him that the order of the discharge of a gun had released. The 20 year old waiter decided to flee together with his friend over the wall. In the afternoon of February 5, 1989, the both hided themselves in an allotment near by the boundary. But their escape failed.

 

Witnesses from the West reported later that they had heard at least ten shots and seen a man be transported. Chris Gueffroy died within minutes and his friend survived getting severely wounded and then taken to a jail. Barely the two days later, somebody told the Family that he was dead. That is vaguely, he might be not alive when he had attacked the military prohibited area. It was told in the obituary as a unfortunate accident, like model speech.

 

Chris Gueffroy was the last deceased in the Berlin Wall. The DDR broke down a half year later. The soldier who had fired at Chris Gueffroy was sentenced to serving from 9 years to 13 years in the Jail. The last politburo had to take responsibility for the order of the gunfire. Erich Honeckers, Successor of Egon Krenz, was sentenced to six and a half imprisonment.

 

The place where Chris Gueffroy had tried to climb over the wall, become now a Park. There are strollers and cyclists on the way. A memorial stone remember a young man who was shot as the last death at the Berlin Wall. The Senator of Berlin let him stand up for his 35th Birthday.

  

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Best answer by julielai  +  816069 Sun, 12 Jul 09 06:06 AM
Highlighted a few things for you to fix. (And I corrected a few things for you.)

 

Chris Gueffroy was gunshot at Berlin Wall in February 1989. He was the last to die that a DDR(East Germany) citizen to pay for the escape to the West with his life. In November 1989 the Berlin Wall (a wall did not occur) occurred.

  

An fatal errors (agreement) gave Chris Gueffroy the Idea to dare his escape-trial out of DDR in February 1989. An familiar Soldier told him that the order of the discharge of a gun had released (What do you mean?). The 20 year old waiter decided to flee together with his friend over the wall. In the afternoon of February 5, 1989, the both hided themselves in an allotment near by the boundary. But their escape failed.

 

Witnesses from the West reported later that they had heard at least ten shots and seen a man be transported (from where?). Chris Gueffroy died within minutes.  and his friend survived, though he was getting severely wounded and then taken to a jail. Barely the two days later, somebody told the Family that he was dead. That is vaguely, he might be not alive when he had attacked the military prohibited area. (Does not make sense) It was mentioned in the obituary as a unfortunate accident, like model speech.

 

Chris Gueffroy was the last to die while trying to get over the Berlin Wall. The DDR broke down a half year later. The soldier who had fired at Chris Gueffroy was sentenced to serving from 9 years to 13 years in the Jail. The last politburo had to take responsibility for the order of the gunfire. Erich Honeckers, Successor of Egon Krenz, was sentenced to six and a half imprisonment.

 

The place where Chris Gueffroy had tried to climb over the wall, become now a Park. There are strollers and cyclists on the way. A memorial stone remember a young man who was shot as the last death at the Berlin Wall. The Senator of Berlin let him stand up for his 35th Birthday.

  

 

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