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Latest post Wed, Nov 24 2004 7:43 PM by Bliss. 1 replies.
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Bliss
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Wed, 24 Nov 04 07:43 PM
Hello,
I'm French and I'm majoring in English, I have a piece of work to do: A french text which I have to translate into English, feel free to correct my mistakes whether they are of syntaxic or grammatical types... The french text had to translate is lofty so don't hesitate to make it as "british" as you can, you can also give the text a punctuation much better than mine... Thank youXxxX
Here is the text
" Come here !" he said to me harshly.
His tone gave me a fright and I stood still. So without any further explanation he slapped me twice. He needed not beat me to make me crying, his look and his voice were enough. It was the first time he had striken me and I was dobly stuned as I ignored what had led him to this exces of violence . My aunt rejoined us as she had heard me crying, she usually stood up for me but this time she did not interpose, so, I must have been extremely offending. However much I wondered, sobbing, what I might have done wrong I did not succeed in finding any single offence. I knew the very evening what had motivated the punishment of my uncle. Claude who had been back from school earlier than me had been telling them that after our lunch, he had seen me going towards the casks and filled them with some earth. He even insisted that he had tried to prevent me from doing so but that I had kept on notwithstanding his advice. For that reason he had sworn to himself that he would tell it to his uncle to have him punishing me, since his mother would not believe him. Alas! His story was believed and without trying to listen to me Uncle Fernand had beaten me.
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nona the brit
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Fri, 26 Nov 04 07:11 PM
Hello Bliss,
Your translation needs quite a lot of work. Your main problem is choosing the correct tenses for your verbs. Here are a few examples.
He needed not beat me to make me crying - He didn't need to hit me to make me cry or He needn't have hit me - his look and voice were enough to make me cry.
'he had stricken' should be he had struck.
'have him punishing' should be 'have him punish'.
You also need to dig out a dictionary and check your spellings. these are incorrect - dobly, stuned, exces,
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