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Cheese1987  #441361  Sun, 11 Nov 07 01:57 PM

Could you help me to proof it? Thanks!

 

Identifying your own learning styles/preferences and strengths/ weaknesses

            I have done the questionnaires provided in Brown’s book. I believe that I am a reflective learner. I do know that I am a slower reader. I always want to make sure that I grasp what I am reading before moving on. I think it is my strength because I will make fewer errors in reading.  I will go on to read slowly so I can ensure I can grasp everything. However, I also find that being a reflective learner will hold me back from participating in class or from speaking the language in general. To become more effective in language learning, I will try to participate more even if I am not always sure I am right.

 

           I also believe that I am on the tolerant side of the continuum of possibilities. When I face some difficulties about foreign language, I will not be bothered. I will keep that tolerance high. I will go on to make personal goal to learn to put certain unknowns on hold while I keep moving on. I will also make sure I will not get so laid back that nothing ever ‘comes in for a landing’.

 

            I like visual learning, too. I understand explanation of concepts better when I read them. To capitalize my strength, I will try to maximize my learning input. Write word and sentences down, draw chart. Remember words by associating them with pictures. However, I would like to change this learning preference. I think I‘d better to be a visual learner because I cannot pay attention to the input of the teacher. It is difficult for me to concentrate on the lessons.  To become more effective in language learning, I will try to hear a story more, use sound-alike words or rhyming words to remember vocabulary. I deeply believe that it is effective if I can have both preferences of visual learning and auditory learning.

 

               In general, I am a low risk-taker. I cannot easily make mistakes without embarrassment. I cannot speak out easily and quickly in a group and class. I cannot write things down easily and freely even if there are mistakes. In the class, I will shy to answer teacher’s question because I fear I will make mistakes. It is clearly that being a low risk-taker is not a good characteristic of learning foreign language. I will try to answer teacher’s question actively, write more composition and find somebody proof it. I will also try to use some new words and structures so I can become more effective in learning.

  
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julielai  #441386  Sun, 11 Nov 07 02:48 PM

Overall, not bad. But the second paragraph needs tweaking. 

I don't think you can improve your English by having someone proof your work. That's why I usually highlight the things you can fix yourself.

Hope this helps.

By the way, are you a CityU English student?  A friend of mine wrote an article on the same topic a few weeks ago.

 Cheese1987 wrote:

                       I also believe that I am on the tolerant side of the continuum of possibilities (What do you mean?). When I face some difficulties about when ______ (add a word) foreign language, I will not be bothered. I will keep that tolerance high (Be specific). I will go on to make personal goal to learn to put certain unknowns on hold while I keep moving on. I will also make sure I will not get so laid back that nothing ever ‘comes in for a landing’. (Be specific. I don't know what you're talking about.)

             I like visual learning, too. I understand explanation (just one) of concepts better when I read them. To capitalize my strength, I will try to maximize my learning input. Write word and sentences down, draw chart (Please write a complete sentence here), rRemember words by associating them with pictures. However, I would like to change this learning preference. I think I‘d better to be a visual learner  (does not make sense) because I cannot pay attention to the input of the teacher. It is difficult for me to concentrate on the lessons.  To become more effective in language learning, I will try to hear a story more, use sound-alike words or rhyming words to remember vocabulary. I deeply believe that it is effective if I can have both preferences of visual learning and auditory learning.

                In general, I am a low risk-taker (no hyphen needed). I cannot easily make mistakes without ____ (add a word) embarrassedment. I cannot speak out easily and quickly in a group and in class. I cannot write things down easily and freely even if there are mistakes. In the class, I will shy  (use another word) to answering (add a word) teacher’s question because I fear (use another word) I will make mistakes. It is clearly (clearly is not an adj.) that being a low risk-taker is not a good characteristic of learning will not ___ ___ (Add words here) foreign language. I will try to answer teacher’s (same problem) question actively, write more composition (one?) and find somebody proof it. I will also try to use some new words and structures so I can become more effective in learning.

  
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