Hi Teacher,
The below letter needs to be forwarded to my interviewer but it seems there are some grammar mistakes and imporper sentence structure. Could someone please help me to correct those mistakes?
I would like to say these 2 sentences in my formal letter as well and how am I gonna include that "I love the office enviroment" and "the interviewer character" in a formal style?
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Dear Nancy,
Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Multimedia Developer with you. Our meeting helped me to better understand your company’s goals and reaffirmed my belief that this is the organization I would like to work for. I think you may see that my experience and qualifications match the requirements you seek. I believe I will produce exactly what your organization and its clients require and beyond.
Since multimedia development is a personal interest in my life, I shall work with enthusiasm. Currently I am improving my Interpersonal and IT skills, as these are also important for my career.
Incidentally, I would like to say thank you for noticing me that I had been slightly defensive in certain time in the interview and I would like to apologize on this matter. I hope you will not view this as a minus point but instead giving me an opportunity as part of my interpersonal development skills toward my career success.
I appreciate the time you took to interview me. I hope to hear from you soon, and would be pleased to meet with you again for another interview.
Sincerely,
Vincent
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I really appreciate your help. Thank You,Vincent