Could somone, also checkmy motivation letter.Please.Thanks!

Hi ADELS,

Welcome to the Forum.

I've done my best.

I wish you good luck with this.

Clive

Dear Sir/Madam:

I suggest that you add a first paragraph to sumarize the situation. eg

              My recent application for  UK permanent residency was recently rejected because of my IELTS scores. All of my scores met the required standard, except that my reading score was very slightly below, by 0.5. With this letter I would like to request special consideration that will permit me to remain in the UK as a permanent resident. Please allow me to start my new life. I will be able to support myself financially without any need for public funds

               I have studied English over many years. I am a good learner, highly motivated and have fluent English; please find enclosed my secondary education certificate copy, my university first year preparatory program, my British Council confirmation letter of English courses and my migrant status approval letter from the Home Office. I am confident that I am qualified and able to meet all the requirements of registration. I believe in my ability to communicate perfectly in English in my professional environment as a ********. If I had not been ill on the day of the exam,  I could definitely have achieved the lost 0.5 point in the reading element. (any chance of getting a note from your doctor about the illness?)

              My new life in England has just begun. I am eager to learn more, to do more and to be more. <<<< nice words I have no doubt that living and working in an English environment will improve my English even further. I would like to use my medical skills to help ill people in the UK. I want to practice my profession legally ,to be able to finance myself and to prepare for my post-graduate degree in ************ next year. I believe the 0.5 point in reading will not affect my ability to communicate and practice as a *************** in any way. I have already been awarded membership of the Society of ********** in the UK.  <<< If you have a good profession and some success already , perhaps you should mention this at the beginning of the letter? I enjoy spending time with English people and I am eager to make the UK my  home. The last thing I want to do as an immigrant in the UK is to live as a parasite depending on public funds. I want to be a productive member of the country's work force.

                                    Thank you for taking the time to review my letter and application. Please give me this opportunity. Your consideration and assistance will be very much appreciated. I look forward to your positive response. If you have further questions, please feel free to contact me.

Yours sincerely,

Hi,

Please read carefully. I've made a few changes.

Clive

Subject: Application for immigrant status. (Do you have a reference number?)

Dear Sir/Madam,

             With this letter I would like to request special consideration due to the unusual situation I have. My application for immigrant status was recently approved << I thought it was not approved ? You need to state the problem clearly by the Home Office under(************). All of my scores in the *** test met the required standard, except that my reading score was very slightly below, by a mere 0.5. I need to start my new life in the UK and support my self financially without any need to public funds. I will be thankful if you can give this letter your favorable consideration.

             I have studied English over many years. I am a good learner, highly motivated and have fluent English. Please find enclosed my secondary education certificate copy, my university first year preparatory program, my British Council confirmation letter of English courses and my immigrant status approval letter from the Home Office. I am confident that I am qualified and able to meet all the requirements of (********). I believe in my ability to communicate perfectly in English in my professional environment as a diagnostic radiographer. If I had not been ill on the day of the exam, I could definitely have achieved the lost 0.5 point in the reading element.

            My new life in England is just about to begin. I am eager to learn more, to do more and to be more. Please allow me to start my new life. I have no doubt that living and working in an English environment will improve my English even further. I would like to use my medical skills to help ill people in the UK. I want to practice my profession legally, to be able to finance myself and to prepare for my post-graduate degree in  (********) next year. I believe the 0.5 point in reading will not affect my ability to communicate and practice as a (********) in any way. I have already been awarded membership of the Society of (**********) in the UK. Employers are convinced of my professional abilities but they are waiting for the (***) registration. I enjoy spending time with English people and I am eager to be one of the best  (*******)  in the country. The last thing I want to do as an immigrant in the UK is to live as a parasite depending on public funds due to unemployment. I want to be a productive member of the country's work force.

             Thank you for taking the time to review my letter and application. Please give me this opportunity. Your consideration and assistance will be very much appreciated. I look forward to your positive response. If you have further questions, please feel free to contact me.

Yours sincerely,

BORMINTAL

Dear Clive

I need help as soon as possible. For the first time in my live I have to write motivation letter and I have no idea how. I liked very much what you wrote for Adels and that is why I'm wrriting this to you.

My motivation letter is for attending Summer School for European Union. And I also want to write motivation letter for schoolarship for the same school.

I just finish Law school and I want to go so much to this Summer School.

Pleas help me!

OK. This is what I wrote for the weekend. Pleas don't mind my English mistakes because I write very bad.

This is the first letter for stating why I want to attend the Summer School :

Dear Sir/Madam

This year in February I successfully complete my Law studies in my country. During the past four years, I studied different kind of Law areas but the most interesting area for me, was the one conected with International and European Law. After I visited a seminar for European Union in my country, I was even more sure that I find myselfe in this field and that is the direction of my perfecting and future.

My country has a status of a candidate and I hope that after I aguire the necessary knoledge and experiense,  I will be able to help my country to implement the often difficult political and economic reforms, that will bring my country closer yo Europe. Based on this and at the same time having a clear European perspective I have strong motivation to come and in practise to experience the historical unique of the Europen Union.

No education is comleted without a experience. All of my knoledge needs practice and coming at your school and visiting the European Union institutions, will allow me to better understand its political sistem and make a clear picture of how it works.

I'm born and live on the European continent. Even that my country is not a part of the Europen Union we share the same dream about the thing we care deeply: peace, security, participatory democracy, justice and solidarity. I'm apsolutely sure that coming there I will gain knoledge that I will be ably to valorize in my country.

I have a consciense of a European, with the biggest hope for my country for one day to be a part of your family.

Finnaly, I strongly wish to participate in the Summer School.

And the other letter about motivation for requesting the reduced (50%) registration fee:

Dear Sir/Madam

I live in one of the most porest countries in Europe, which in the past 16 years is strugguling its way through transition. I belive that you know  the main history of my country, the crises and the resint war that we had, and which produced even biger poverty. In present days our goverment is trying to make the economy rise but yet the average salary is no more then 150 euros for a month.

I come out from a four memebers family and none of us is employed. We are a traditional agrocultural family where our main occupation from which we find resourses for our finances is agroculture and agronomy. The incomes only from this work were not enough for my education and durring my studies I also worked in sesions to pay for my education. In this issue my country provides very small or none scholarship for students.

After I graduated I still don't have a job and now I'm in possition where I can come only with reduced fee, because togethar with my parents help and my savings I can pay the rest of the expences.

Considering the fact tof my extremly strong wish to participate at your Summer School I kindly request for you help, which would helep me to come there.

These are my letters. They shoul be written on the aplication and I'm not sure if the begining of the letter is corect and I also don't know how to end.

Now, PLEAS corect me! I'm waiting for your sugestions and help.