Could you check my English?

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Kenta  #534955  Tue, 01 Jul 08 03:25 AM
Hello. I made two dialogues. Could you chech them?

No. 1

M: I planted 10 tulip bulbs in my garden this spring,
   but some of them didn't come up.

F: Well, but they are beautiful, anyway.

M: Thank you. I hope we will be able to enjoy more tulips next spring.

No. 2

M: We're going to have some friends over for a party next Saturday
   and I hope you'll join us, too.

F: I'd love to. I have nothing scheduled in particular this weekend.
                                                                                           [for the weekend]

M: Great. Anytime after one will be fine with us.

                                       Thank you!

  
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Grammar Geek  #534958  Tue, 01 Jul 08 04:03 AM

Kenta, you plant bulbs in the fall.

No. 1

M: I planted 10 tulip bulbs in my garden last fall, but some of them didn't come up.

 

F: Well, the ones that did are beautiful anyway. (Or, Well, the garden is beautiful anyway.)

M: Thank you. I hope we will be able to enjoy more tulips next spring.

No. 2

M: We're going to have some friends over for a party next Saturday and I hope you'll join us, too. -- This could sound like they are not "some friends" but something else if you keep the too.

F: I'd love to. I have nothing scheduled in particular this weekend. -- This isn't very gracious. I'd love to. I'm free this weekend.
                                                                                           [for the weekend]

M: Great. Anytime after one would be great.

  
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Kenta  #535023  Tue, 01 Jul 08 09:06 AM
Thank you very much. 

Well, the ones that did are beautiful anyway.   

You left out "but". If I say "Well, but the ones that  .... anyway," is it  wrong or odd?
  
Grammar Geek  #535106  Tue, 01 Jul 08 01:34 PM

I would say either "But the ones that did..." or "Well the ones that did" but not BOTH "Well, but..."

On the other hand, I suppose I may say it in conversation, but it's redundant, and wouldn't do it if iI were writing dialogue.

  
Kenta  #535123  Tue, 01 Jul 08 02:16 PM
Your explanation is very instructive. Thank you again!
  
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