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Latest post Mon, Sep 11 2006 12:49 PM by nona the brit. 5 replies.
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Chip322  +  264978 Sun, 10 Sep 06 03:23 PM

Hi. I will take job interview and have English exam. So now I am practising for it.

Could you please read my essay and check it? The topic is the challenging that you have faced it. This is not all of my essay because it is longer so I just wanna ask you to check my main parts of sentences.

I am really sorry for taking your time. If someone give me advise about my English, I am appriciated for it. Thanks for your time and kindness. chip322

The challenges make people tough and developed physically and mentally. In terms of my experiences, the biggest challenging was completing clinical practice in my part of University studies in Australia. I attended the nursing training for 3 months in hospital and at the time I went to the renal and haematology unit. When I started working in the first placement, I was nervous because I did not know well the working style of nursing and their system. Therefore, for me everything was new and cultivated. Even though I had working experience as a nurse in my country, the number of differences for nursing between Australia and Japan are existed and I need to learn and absorb both clinical studies and their differences.

 

For examples, when working as a nurse in Japan, I was used to have primary patients who were my responsibilities and take care of them for a certain period. Then, I could get along with my patients and understand more about patient’s condition, needs and their thinking for disease step by step. In contrast, in case of my practice in Australia, the patients were always changing and I had to understand the patients’ health status and their problems during the handover or quick assessment when I monitored their vital signs. The language problem was also big hurdle for me to understand patients. I need to know their specific terms and abbreviations and make sure content of medical notes to take my responsibilities.

 

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nona the brit  +  265088 Sun, 10 Sep 06 07:04 PM

The challenges that you have faced (if the topic was given to you in the way you have written it above then the person testing your English has a few problems too!)

Challenges make people tough and develop physically and mentally. In terms of my experiences, the biggest challenge was completing clinical practice in my part of my university studies in Australia. I attended nursing training for 3 months in hospital and at the time I worked in the renal and haematology units. When I started working in the first placement, I was nervous because I did not know the working style of nursingand their system very well . Therefore, for me, everything was new (and cultivated This part doesn't make sense). Even though I had work experience as a nurse in my own country, there were a number of differences between nursing in Australia and Japan and I needed to learn and absorb both clinical studies and their differences.

 

For example, when working as a nurse in Japan, I was used to having primary patients who were my responsibility and taking care of them for a certain period. Then, I could get along with my patients and understand more about their conditions and needs. In contrast, in Australia, the patients were always changing and I had to understand the patients’ health status and their problems during the handover or make a quick assessment when I monitored their vital signs. The language problem was also a big hurdle for me in understanding patients. I needed to know the specific terms and abbreviations and make sure of the content of medical notes to take responsibility.

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Chip322  +  265245 Mon, 11 Sep 06 06:09 AM

Dear nona the brit

Thanks for your time and elimination for my essay.

Can I ask the meaning your comment? I am sorry for my poor reading skill for English.So you mean, my essay does not answer well for this topic or you dont know the purpose of this topic and thier examiner. I checked some webiste and this questions often apper in the English exam that I will take.

The other questions are...difficulties living in a foreing countries/Please tell us your determination/ Please describe the most interesting travelling that you have been before...

Can I ask those questions, should I follow the academic style of essay or just describing my experience and I can use many times 'I am' for English exam during interview??

Sorry. I ask you many questions. If you have time, can u teach for me?

Thanks very much. chip322

 

nona the brit  +  265320 Mon, 11 Sep 06 10:00 AM
All I meant by my comment is that 'the challenging that you have faced it' is incorrect English and I hoped that the exam does not actually use incorrect grammar in its questions. The correct way to express this is 'the challenges that you have faced'.
Chip322  +  265359 Mon, 11 Sep 06 12:24 PM

Thanks very much for your replying. Now I understand the meaning.

I will try to do my best for my interview and exam.

chip322

nona the brit  +  265370 Mon, 11 Sep 06 12:49 PM
Good luck with it Smile [:)]
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