My assignment is to type a Descriptive/Informative Essay. I am graded 50% on content, 40% on grammar and mechanics, and 10% on style. Could anyone read my essay and suggest some corrections? Please bold or make corrections visible. The help will be greatly appreciated.
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The Ultimate Fear
For me there is no question in my mind of what I fear the most. One day
He will be the most feared being by all that do not fear Him now. When He comes,
the lost will stand before Him and tremble like leaves in the wind. He
will come like a thief in the night, when no one is expecting. I fear Him
the most because I know He holds great power. What I fear is God
Almighty, the creator of the universe and the Lord of my life.
As a
Christian, I fear God because He is my heavenly father. To think about
God sends chills down my back. He is the creator of the universe and also
the creator of Heaven and Hell. God has always existed. He is Alpha and
Omega, the beginning and the end. Often people cannot comprehend that God
has always existed. This is because people
live in a world of time. Explaining God to an unbeliever is like
explaining a math equation to a dead person. The only way a person can
come to believe and fear God is by the Holy Spirit. Fearing God is the
beginning of knowledge and truth.
Like my
earthly father, God chastises me when I sin against Him. I remember when
I was a little child, I broke my father’s garage window. My father came
outside
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to discover the broken glass.
He found me and began to yell, letting me know that I had done wrong. I
ran from him, but he finally caught me and gave me the punishment I
deserved. My father punished me because of his love for me. This
also applies with my heavenly father. When I sin against God, conviction hits
me like a truck. I then know that I have
done wrong. God will punish me for my sins because of His unexplainable
love. God’s love is far greater than even a mother’s love for her only
child. I know that I am the apple of God’s eye, but I also know that His reprimanding
hand will keep me where I need to be in life. I can run as fast as
the speed of light and hide like a word in a crossword puzzle. However, God will find me and give me the
punishment for my sins. He has His eye on me like a hawk.
The fear
that unbelievers will face will be tremendous. The lost will stand before
the King of Kings and the Lord of Lords. Unbelievers will be on their
knees like beggars begging for money. When God came before He showed
love, but the next time He comes, He will pour His wrath on all that denied His
Holy name. God is love, but because He is love, He is also just. A
just God cannot overlook sin. Those who do not believe will not be
covered by the blood of Jesus Christ. The lost will stand before a Holy
and Righteous God and be naked in sin before His eyes. God will say to
the lost, "I never knew ye," and the lost will be cast down in a pit
of fire. The pit of fire will be hotter than a burning furnace. The
pain will last forever and ever. There is no water in Hell to cool the
tongue. To be in Hell is to be absent from all love. This is why people
should fear God now. To escape His wrath
is to fear Him now.
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Ultimately, I fear
the wrath of God. I know that this fear
will save me from an everlasting Hell when I die. Like a shepherd, God
leads and guides me through my life. When I disobey His Word, He uses His
staff to pull me back where I need to be in life. The fear of God is
unappreciated like an underrated film that does not show in movie
theaters. Jesus is the only way, the only truth, and the only light, and
no one will enter the gates of Heaven without the fear of God Almighty.