Dialogue to do with economics

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Kind Villain  #222836  Fri, 05 May 06 11:27 PM

Hello! I have just written the following dialogue and would like someone to correct it. I need it to be fairly formal. I'll be thankful for any help. Here's the dialogue.

A. As far as I know, students' incomes are different, as they often get money from their parents or

as an allowance in university. Fewer students have savings accounts and receive interest on them.

B. I totally agree with you. What is more, nowadays the majority of students has temporary jobs,

receiving certain benefits, which allows them to expand their sources of income.

A. It is an interesting fact that some enterprising young people have their own businesses and are

self-employed - that is to say, they receive income after paying all the expenses of their

businesses. The number of those who use rent on someone's property as their additional income, is

growing.

B. In other words, if a student has acquired good knowledge of how people make their living, this

will help him to increase his own income.

A. Exactly! You cannot put it any better! This is when the time comes to evaluate (and sometimes to

measure in terms of money), the knowledge of economics!

C. I generally agree with you but sometimes students have more than one source of income. And only

a small portion of this type of income is spent on paying for education.

A. I cannot agree with you on this point. Yet, the vast majority of students do not get either

wage, or interest on savings accounts, or income from business activity. The principal source of

students' income is parents' help or an allowance. Furthemore, you cannot relate the latter to

constant payments, as it depends on examination results.

C. You might be right. Nonetheless, it is necessary to distinguish  between income and wealth.

A. What do you mean?

C. It is a well-known fact that income is no wealth at all. You can use wealth for receiving

income, for instance, as rent, interest on savings account, or income from some corporation's

equity. Therefore, students' sources of income depend on their families' sources of welfare.

  
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Mister Micawber  #223215  Sun, 07 May 06 08:10 AM

Hello Villain,

Are people actually going to perform this dialogue?  That makes a lot of difference to how it is written.

  
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Kind Villain  #223395  Sun, 07 May 06 09:43 PM

No, they aren't. What I have posted is called a dialogue in my text-book. I don't know why the athrours of the text-book decided to name this piece of writing a 'dialogue'. I know that it isn't actually a dialogue. Just correct this 'dialogue' as if it were a usual topic on Economics.

  
Mister Micawber  #223572  Mon, 08 May 06 02:28 PM

Frankly, I'm not sure what to do to fix this thing, Villain.  The initial phrases all seem out of place, and some of the turns are non sequitors.  It looks as if you were asked to incorporate a lot of terms that cannot really be squeezed into one discussion.  Well, here is my effort:


A. As far as I know, students' incomes are different.  They often get money from their parents, or as a university scholarship.  Fewer students have savings accounts and receive interest.

B. But what is more, most students nowadays have temporary jobs and receive certain benefits, which expands their sources of income.

A. It is an interesting fact that some enterprising young people have their own businesses.  They are self-employed - that is to say, they receive income after paying all their business expenses.  The number of those who receive rent on property as additional income is also growing.

B. You know, if students have acquired a good understanding of how people make a living, this will help them increase their own income.

A. Exactly! During one's university days is the time to evaluate one's understanding of economics-- and sometimes to measure it in terms of money!

C. I generally agree with you, but although students sometimes have more than one source of income, only a small portion of it may be spent on their education.

A. Yet, the vast majority of students do not receive wages, or interest on savings accounts, or income from business.  The principal source of students' income is their parents or a scholarship.  And you cannot rely on the latter for steady income, as it depends on examination results.

C. Maybe we need to distinguish between income and wealth.

A. What do you mean?

C. Income is actually no wealth at all. You can gain wealth by receiving income-- for instance, as rent, interest, or dividends. Therefore, students' sources of income depend on their families' sources of wealth.



Sigh.  Sorry, KV-- I really cannot figure out where this 'conversation' is going, or why Mr C is so distracted; the 3 speakers seem to be talking past each other.  Perhaps another poster will be able to sort it out better for you.  Anyway, good luck with it.


  
Anonymous  #223632  Mon, 08 May 06 07:10 PM

Hello Mister Micawber! First of all, I'd like to thank you for fixing this thing. I quite agree with you about the stupid structure of this dialogue. You're absolutely right that what I've posted here doesn't even remotely resemble a dialogue, converstaion, or whatever. But I'm not to blame because my task is to do a translation of this thing from Russian into English. I believe you understand that I can't possibly come up to my teacher and say that this exercise's ***. My teacher will eye me strictly and say that this isn't his/her fault either, as s/he isn't the author of the textbook where this exercise is presented. Well, but I don't really care about this. What matters to me is that there aren't many grammatical errors in my translation and that you made my translation sound a lot more natural. It's awesome! Thank you once more!

  
Kind Villain  #223633  Mon, 08 May 06 07:12 PM

Hello Mister Micawber! First of all, I'd like to thank you for fixing this thing. I quite agree with you about the stupid structure of this dialogue. You're absolutely right that what I've posted here doesn't even remotely resemble a dialogue, converstaion, or whatever. But I'm not to blame because my task is to do a translation of this thing from Russian into English. I believe you understand that I can't possibly come up to my teacher and say that this exercise's ***. My teacher will eye me strictly and say that this isn't his/her fault either, as s/he isn't the author of the textbook where this exercise is presented. Well, but I don't really care about this. What matters to me is that there aren't many grammatical errors in my translation and that you made my translation sound a lot more natural. It's awesome! Thank you once more!

  
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