New2grammar  +  548665 Wed, 30 Jul 08 03:14 PM Five people around the world die from cancer every five seconds. And 3 people around the world die from smoking related diseases every five seconds. While  there's nothing much we can do to prevent cancer, smoking related diseases are completely preventable. Are there any mistakes? Thanks. New2grammar Joined on Tue, Nov 21 2006 Veteran Member 7,676 Who wants to go sailing around the world with me?

	Avangi  +  548668 Wed, 30 Jul 08 03:18 PM (You can stop smoking to prevent cancer  -   just kidding.) I'd suggest "three" in place of "3" just to be consistent.   - A. Avangi Joined on Mon, Nov 19 2007 Veteran Member 8,168 ". . . le plaisir delicieux et toujours nouveau d'une occupation inutile." - Henri de Regnier

	New2grammar  +  548675 Wed, 30 Jul 08 03:24 PM Thanks, Avangi. I know what you mean. Perhaps, I shouldn't have chosen cancer which is linked to smoking. New2grammar

	Clive  +  548742 Wed, 30 Jul 08 04:55 PM Hi, Five people around the world die from cancer every five seconds. And 3 people around the world die from smoking related diseases every five seconds. While  there's nothing much we can do to prevent cancer, smoking related diseases are completely preventable. Five people around the world die from cancer every five seconds, and three people around the world die from smoking-related diseases every five seconds. While  there's nothing much we can do to prevent cancer, smoking-related diseases are completely preventable. I don't like the repetition  in your first two sentences. How about this? Around the world every five seconds, five people die from cancer and three people die from smoking-related diseases. While  there's nothing much we can do to prevent cancer, smoking-related diseases are completely preventable. You seem to be taking the position that cancer is never related to smoking. Best wishes, Clive Clive Joined on Thu, Oct 28 2004 Canada Veteran Member 29,575 El tango argentino es un pensamiento triste que se puede bailar (The tango argentino is a sad thought which can be danced) Enrique Santos Discépolo

	Clive  +  548750 Wed, 30 Jul 08 05:11 PM Hi, Yes, repetition is a common rhetorical technique in speaking. But it's usually less effective in writing. Clive' Clive