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high every one, I wrote an essay on the poem I heard a fly buzz when I died and I need someone to tell me if it is correct. may be I should tell you that I am not a native english speaker so donot be harsh here it is                                  I Heard a Fly-Buzz When I Died              I Heard a Fly-Buzz When I Died is one of Emily Dickenson’s most famous poems. Like many of Dickenson’s poems, this poem discussed the subject of dieing and what happens to a person when she/he dies.        In this poem, Dickenson uses the persona of a dieing person. In the first line Dickenson gives a way the theme and the climax moment when she says, “I heard a fly - buzz when I died”; then she goes back to explaining what led to this moment. By doing so Dickenson does not follow a strict chronological order. In the second line Dickenson describes the atmosphere in the room: “The stillness in the room/ was like the stillness in the air”. The stillness was not because no one knew what to say or what to do, but it was because the tension in the room was very high. It was similar to the calm before the storm or the calm between two storms. The silence was electric. The first storm was caused by the crying and weeping of the relatives and friends who gathered around the dieing person’s bed to say farewell and hear any last words. “The eyes around had wrung them dry / and breaths were gathering firm” the mourners cried until their eyes became dry, and now they are quite, waiting “For that last onset - when king / be witnessed in the room”. They are waiting for the actual death to happen, Waiting for the king metaphorically referring to the death it self or the death angel [angel of death]. In the third stanza Dickenson says that she gave a way all of her belongings, even all of her personal belongings. She kept nothing for herself from the mortal life. She made all the needed preparations to die. Then at the most crucial moment, the moment of death, a small inferior irrelevant insect seized Dickenson’s attention. The fly could be a metaphor for death or for the sins that Dickenson committed in her lifetime. The fly is standing between her and the light. The fly could refer to sins and mortal life and how insignificant it is, compared to eternal life. The light could be a metaphor for her good deeds, the good deeds that will enable her to go to heaven and save her from hill Hell. In the first line of the fourth stanza Dickenson says “With blue uncertain stumbling buzz”, using a synaesthesia when she confuses sound with color. The last two lines are where death finally happens. Dickenson started to lose her senses: “the windows failed”. Windows is a metaphor for her eyes, and she did not mean that she lost only her sight but that she started to lose all her senses, but used synecdoche, "the part for the whole". After the windows failed Dickenson could no longer see, hear or feel. She died.       The poem consists of four stanzas. Each stanza is four lines long. The rhyme scheme is A B C B. Also all the rhymes before the final stanza are half rhymes (room/storm), (firm/room) and (be/fly). Except in the last stanza, the rhyme in the last stanza is a full rhyme (me/see). Dickenson used this technique to build tension. A sense of completion only comes when Dickenson dies.